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This is a discussion on Raye Shumari Baraye MuqabiLa Maah-e-JuLy 2007 within the Urdu Writer's Club forums, part of the Urdu Adab category; Asalamu Alaikum Muqabley Main Hisaa lene wale Members ka sukriya...Faisla Jugdes Karain Gai.. Khayal Ki InFaradiyat...4 Nasar or Beyaniah....3 Kahani/Mazmoon....3 ...
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07-21-2007, 09:38 AM
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Asalamu Alaikum Muqabley Main Hisaa lene wale Members ka sukriya...Faisla Jugdes Karain Gai.. Khayal Ki InFaradiyat...4 Nasar or Beyaniah....3 Kahani/Mazmoon....3 Total No...10
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07-21-2007, 09:40 AM
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#3
07-21-2007, 09:42 AM
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Tehrer # 1 imran22 لڑکی اس و قت پرشانی میں ہے اور سوچ رہی ہے وھ خالی مکان دیکھ کر اس کا محبوب کب آے گا ۔۔۔۔ جدای کے وھ لمحات کب ختم ہوں گے۔۔۔۔ ؟ یا ا س خا لی مکان کے جسیا ۔۔۔اس کا انتظار بھی گھنا جنگل بن جائے گا اسی امید پر جی ری ھے وہ ۔۔ معصوم لڑکی۔۔ Tehrer # 2 muhammad junaid khan JAATAI JAATAI LARKI NAI AAKHRI BAAR APNAI KHUSHIO KAI MASKIN KO DEKHA OR SOCHA KITNA MUSHKIL HAI USKAI LIYAI APNI IS CHOTI SI JANNAT KO CHOR KAR JAANA KITNA AARAM THA USAI IS GHAR MAI APNAI MEHBOOB KAI SAATH, KITNA SUKOON THA YAHA WOH SUKOON JO USAI MEHLOO KI ZINDAGI MAI KABHI NA MILA WOH CHOTI CHOTI KHUSHIA JINHAI WOH JEENA CHAHTI THI WOH SAB YAHA THI USKA PYAR YAHA THA USKA JAHAN YAHA THA KITNA PYAR KARTA THA WOH SHAKS IS SAI USKI AANKHO MAI USAI KITNAI RANG NAZAR AATAI THAI, WOH YAI AANKHAI KABHI BHOOL NA PAI GI AANSO KA AIK QATRA USKAI HAATH PAR GHIRTA HAI OR USAI YAAD AATA HAI KAI USAI JAANA HOGA APNAI PYAR KO BACHANAI KAI LIYAI WAPAS US SUNHERI PINJRAI MAI JAHA PYAR JAZBAT KAI KOI KEEMAT NAHI PATA NAHI USKA PYAR KIA SOCHAI GA MAGAR WOH KIA KARAI AGAR NA GAYI TO WOH YAHA AAJAIGAI OR USKAI PYAR KO MARDALAIGAI..... |
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#4
07-21-2007, 09:45 AM
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Tehrer # 3 Dhanak Aik tenha lerki jis ko muhabat aur dosti ki zaroorat hai. Wo aisay gher ko dekh rahi hai jahan es ki ya khawahish poori ho sakti hai. Wo os gher ki taraf kadam berhana chahti hai lakin derti hai k kahin osay dhutkar na dia jay. Wo os waqat tak intazar ker sakti hai jab tak os gher k makeen osay apna na lain kahin ya intazar os ki jaan na le lay............. Tehrer # 4 khush vo kahi ja nahi rahi, kahi say ai ha, shaid lamba safer,, vo gher , shaid manzil, Umed, ird grd bag nahi jangel ha, dor dor tk koi or gher nahi, koi or makeen nahi, hayret may ha vo shiad,yaha kon ho skta ha ... ya pir .. apni manzil samnay ha, soch rahi ha ajay brhoon ya nahi? plet jana bayhhter ha ya agay brhna, ya shaid kashmakesh may ha .,is rastay ko tay kr pay gi kh nahi,,,waha tk pohanch pay gi kh nahi, yeah thora sa rasta,, tay kr pay gi kh nahi, kia maloom agay kia ho? kia maloom gher may kia ho, koi ho bhi kh na ho, soch may ha , tay nahi kr pa rahi kh agay brh jay ya wapis palet jay, yahi soch kuch lamho k liay osay yaha jamid kr rahi ha, fayslay ki ghari ha, agy brhay ya nahi, yaha hi baythi rh jay kia?aghay brhnay ki himet nahi ho pa rahi or shaid wapis paletnay ka mn nahi, shaid ab wapis jay bhi nahi, but ........gher bend ha, ajay kia ha ,, nahi maloom, ... manzil samnay ha laykin chupi hoi ha, gher ki diwaroon may bend ha, laykin agya brhna to paray ga hi, ya pir................. .......... palet jayin ???........... Tehrer # 5 Kanwal  |
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#5
07-21-2007, 09:51 AM
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Tehrer # 6 mainna میرے پیروں سے بندھی ہے تھکن اتنی طویل مسا فت کے آخری چند قدم اتنے بھاری کیوں ہو جاتے ہیں۔۔۔۔۔۔۔۔ سفر کی ساری تھکان ان چند قدموں میں کیوں سمٹ آتی ہے ۔۔۔۔۔۔۔۔۔۔۔۔۔۔۔ منزل اتنی قریب ھو کر دور کیوں لگنے لگتی ہے۔۔۔۔۔۔۔۔۔ یہ وہی گھر ھے نا جہاں مین نے جنم لیا۔۔۔۔۔۔۔۔۔۔۔۔ ۔ انہی درختوں کے درمیاں تو اچھلتے کودتے پل کر جواں ہوی۔۔۔۔۔۔۔۔۔ پھر آج یہ سارا منظر اجنبی کیوں ہو گیا ہے۔۔۔۔۔۔۔۔۔۔۔۔ یہاں اتنا ویرانہ کیوں دیکھائی دے رہا ہے۔۔۔۔۔۔۔۔۔۔۔۔ ہر سو سناٹا کیوں گونج رہا ہے۔۔۔۔۔۔۔۔۔۔۔۔ نہیں نہیں ۔۔۔۔۔۔۔۔ شاید یہ میرا وہم ہے۔۔۔۔۔۔۔۔۔۔۔۔۔ یہ گھر یہ جگہ آج بھی ویسی ھے جیسے میں چھوڑ کر گئی تھی۔۔۔۔۔۔۔۔۔۔۔۔ اسی طرح پر سکوں اپنی آغوش میں پناہ دینے والی۔۔۔۔۔۔۔۔۔۔۔ ایک غلطی کی اتنی بڑی سزا تو نہیں ہو سکتی۔۔۔۔۔۔۔۔۔۔۔ ۔۔ محبت کی خواہش کی اتنی بڑی قیمت تھورا وصول کریں گے میرے پیارے کہ می را گھر‘ میری جنت‘ میری پناہ گاہ ہی چھین لیں مجھ سے۔۔۔۔۔۔۔۔ معاف کر دیں گے۔۔۔۔۔۔۔۔۔۔۔ بڑھ کر گلے لگا لیں گے۔۔۔۔۔۔۔۔ آہ کاش! مین اس ظالم شخس کے جھانسے میں نہ آئی ہوتی۔۔۔۔۔۔۔۔ یارب کیسے میں ان منحوس لمحوں کی بازگشت سے خود کو نجات دلاوں!۔۔۔۔۔۔۔۔۔ ۔ کہاں سے وہ ہمت لاوں کہ اس چند قدم کے فاصلے کو پاٹ سکوں۔۔۔۔۔۔۔۔۔۔۔۔۔۔۔۔ ۔ Tehrer # 7 TheMask  Tehrer # 8 Noor-al-sabah  |
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07-21-2007, 09:55 AM
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Tehrer # 9 Aas Woh Ghur Khushgawaar shaam hai...aur Sani ka jee ker reha tha ke woh Kami per apna sandwhich kheench maare. Jub se woh aur us ke collegues is unjaan se puhaari Muqaam per picnic ke liye aaye they, tub se pata nahin kiyoon, jaise group bundi si ho geyi ho...Sani aik teref aur doosre sub us ke mukhalif. Woh janti thi ke yeh sub Kami ki shuraaret hai, mugur woh birah-e-raast use mukhatib ker ke aur hunsi aur tunz ka nishana nahin bun'na chahti thi, is liye jaise taise ker ke sehti rehi...Mugur ab to hud hi ho chuki thi. Ghusse aur jhullahut ke mile jule ta'suraat chehre per numayan they...aur woh kissi bhi lumhe aape se bahir ho sekti thi...sandwhich us ke haath main pichuk sa gaya tha, jise dekh ker woh saare apni hunsi rokne ki az hud koshishon main they... Aur phir woh jhutke se uthi aur aik simt chul nikli... Pehle to us ke peeche se qehqahon ka aik toofan utha, mugur jub us ke qadem na ruke to Kami nain awaaz di aur uth ker use rokne ki koshish kee, mugur doosre arhe aa gaye ke use jane diya jaaye, jub ghussa thunda ho ga to khudhi wapis aa jaaye gi. Kami bhi khamoshi se betha gaya mugur us ke chehre se us ki undarooni keifiyyet saf zahir thi. Woh chulti rehi...aur un sub ko kosti rehi. Kaafi dair ba'd jub us nain nuzrain uthaain to apne aap ko aik bilkul ajnabi mahol main paaya. Ghusse ki jugha tujussus nain le li, aur woh bure inhimaak se apne ird gird ke sur subz aur shadaab durukht aur putton ko dekhne lugi. Shehron ke baasi qudreti nuzaron ko apne computer ki desktop per muzayyan kerne ki hud tuk hi khush rehte hain, aur jub un ka kabhi uchanuk is terha qudret ke dilkush nuzaron se tukraao hota hai to un ki bhi shayed wehi keifiyyet hoti ho gi jo is waqt Sani ki thi. Sani to jaise kho hi geyi thi, aur woh un qudreti nuzaron se shayed pehli baar itne qareeb huwi thi. Who inhi nuzaron main gum thi ke uchanuk uske peeche putton ki sursurahet huwi. Us per jaise sukta sa taari ho gaya. Woh mur ker dekhna chahti thi mugur yeh khauf ke agar woh hili to pata nahin kiya ho, issi durr nain us ke dil ki dhurkenain taiz tareen ker dee theen. Kuch lumhe woh issi terha apni saans roke khuri rehi aur sochti rehi, ke uchanuk jhariyon ke under se aik gulehri namoodar huwi aur ain Sani ke saamne a ker munjamid ho geyi. Sani ki to jaan hi chuli geyi thi, aur gulehri ko is terha tuktuki baandhe dekh ker us ki to hunsi hi nikel geyi. Ab gulehri ko shayed shock pohoncha tha isiliye who apni dum zameen se ooper uthati huwi aik simt daur geyi. Sani us ke peeche be ikhtiyaar chul peri. Abhi us nain chund qadem hi liye they ke us ke saamne kuchi serek namoodar huwi. Us ki aankhain gulehri ka ta’qub ker rehi theen, jub use kuchi serek ke akhir main who ghur nuzur aaya. Woh aik dum ruk geyi aur apne qareeb hi durukht ki oat main chup geyi….gulehri itminaan se daurti huwi ghur ke derwaze ke saamne ruki…aik second ke liye muri aur phir ghayeb ho geyi. Sani durukht ke oat main khuri soch rehi thi ke is jugha per…itni beronuq jugha per aakhir yeh ghur kaisa? Woh yehi sochte huwe ke kahen us ghur ka main koi makeen na ho, aur use na dekh le, kuch dair usi terha be hurket rehi, mugur kissi ki ahut na pa ker woh aik haath durukht per rukhe us ghur ka jaiza lene lugi. Go ke ghur bilkul sakit lug reha tha, mugur is weerane main hone ke bawajood use us ghur se kissi qissam ki wehshut, yaan khauf mehsoos nahin ho reha tha….Ghaur kerne per woh is nateeje per pohonchi ke yeh ghaliban kissi ameer zade ka summer cottage hai, jisse purindon ke shikaar ka shoq reha ho ga…kiyoon ke is ilaqe main na hi khauf naak durindon ka basera hai, na hi zehreele bichuon aur saanpon ka. Us ki bunawet bhi khasi neyi hi thi. Sani abhi inhin sochon main thi ke use apne peeche kuch logon ki awaazain sunaai deen. Ghaur kiya to pata chula ke who awazain us ke collegues ki theen, jo gala phaare us ka naam le rehe they…Us nain be ikhtiyaar ‘Main yahan hoon’ ki nida dee…laiken agle hi lumhe us ke chehre per aik shureer si muskurahet ubhri. Soch rehi thi ke unhain thora sutaaye gi, aakhir ko who bhi to itni dair apna ghussa burdaasht kerti rehi hai. Yeh sochte hi who durukht ke uqab se nikli aur cottage ki janib chul dee. US ke collegues ki awaazain ab bohot qareeb aa chuki theen, ghaliban Sani ki awaaz un tuk pohonch geyi thi issi liye who teer ki terha udher hi aa rehe they. Sani afra tefreeh ke alam main derwaze ki janib jhupti, aur derwaza bughair kissi muzahimet ke khulta chula gaya. Who hairaan thi ke aakhir is cottage ka qafal khula kaisa tha, na hi us ke handle per kissi qissam ki sukhti ke nishanaat they, jaise is cottag ke makeen nain jaan booch ker ise khula chora ho. Aik lamhe ko who hichkichaayi ke shayed under koi hai mugur under ka jaiza lete hi us ki saans main saans aayi. Under bilkul khali tha, aik dum khaali. Usi waqt who under ki terf lupki aur derwaza bund kerte huwe dayeen janib deewar main lugi khirki se chipek geyi. Ab woh unhain dekh sekti thi, jo ke ab bhi ussi simit chulte aa rehe they aur lugataar us ka naam pukaar rehe they. Who janti thi key yeh log use dhoondte huwe shayed ghur ka bhi chukker lugayen ge, yehi soch ker woh khirki se saath wale kumre main chupne ke liye murri hi thi, jub Sani nain use dekha. Khauf ki shiddet se us ke pair lurkhuraaye aur woh apna tawazun burqarar na rukh seki aur uski kumer deevar se buri terha tukraayi, mugur us ki haulnaak cheekhain us derd ki wejha se na theen, bulke yeh who durr tha jo us per buri terha hawi ho chukka tha. Laiken who lerki apni jugha se tus se muss bhi na huwi. Sani ki aankhain shayed apne hewlon se girne ko theen, kumre main siref us ki taizi se chulti huwi saanson ki awaaz thi. Woh lerki ab bhi waise hi khuri rehi. Us ke baal bikhre huwe they, jin per mitii aur gurd ki tehain jummi huwi theen…kupron per surkhi ke be tahasha nishanaat they, gehre surkh rug ke…khoon ke dhubbe…aur woh ab bhi khamosh khuri thi. Us ka chehra neech ki teref jhuka huwa tha aur Saani nain abhi tuk us ka chahra na dekha tha…. “Sani….kahan ho……sani….SANI…..”…a wazain ab ghur ke bilkul qareeb aa chuki theen…Sani ka dil phutne ko tha…Use to shayed yeh bhi nahin mehsoos ho reha tha, ke us ki aankhon se zar-o-qitaar pani jari hai, woh to siref aik hi ehsaas main lipti thi….khauf ke ehsaas main…Ussi lamhe who bughair soche samjhe derwaze ki teref jhupti…laiken durwaza nahin khula… Cheekh cheekh ker us ke gule ki rugain ubhur ayi theen, mugur derwaza us se na khul seka. Usi lumhe use apne peeche ahut ka ehsaas huwa….use sukte ka shaded jhutka sa luga tha, saare a’asaab shul ho chuke they…sochne samajhne ki tamam quwwatain muflooj ho chuki theen…who kaampti taangon aur dhurukte dil se muri… Ab woh lerki us se siref aik guz door chehra jhukaaye khuri thi…..Us ke jism main hulki si junbish huwi…Us nain chehra uthaya aur Sani ko apni humshukel nuzur aayi, laiken chehra is buri terha musukh chukka tha ke Sani aik falag shugaaf cheekh maar ker zameen bos ho geyi. …………………………………. Kamran doctor Shah ke saath musroof tha, aur baqi saare collegues aik side per bethe they. Sub ke chehron se pareshaani tupuk rehi thi. “Kamran sahib, main filhal aap ko un se milne nahin de sekta…aap kel kisi waqt ayen…unhain jis qissam ka shock pohoncha hai…unhain shayed aik mukhsoos phychotherapy ki zarooret paish aaye gi….woh abhi abhi apne huwas main nahin hain” Kamran nain kuch aur kehna chaha mugur phir chup reha. Woh kuch sochta huwa apne collegues ki teref dekne luga jub doctor nian use mukhatib kiya… “Aap log buta sekte hain, woh aap logon ko aisi condition main kahan mili thi?” “Hum use dhoond rehe they, ke jub us nain humain awaaz dee…hum daurte huwe wahan pohonche to, who humain jhariyon main behosh peri mili…us waqt us ke chehre ki rungut bilkul neeli per chuki thi…” “Hmmm…to aap keh rehe hain ke wahan un jhariyon ke aas paas koi ghur, yaan koi cottage nahin tha?” Kamran nain chonkte huwe doctor ko dekha….us ke collegues bhi apni sochon se chonkte huwe doctor ko tukne luge… Doctor unhain chonkte huwe dekh ker khud hi kehne luge… “Saniya nain do aik baar, durwaza kholo….bur buraya tha…nurse ke mutabiq, jub bhi saniya nain yeh keha hai, us ke chehre per ajeeb se kurb ke ta’asurat jum jate hain” Kamran aur us ke collegues Doctor ko aise dekh rehe they ke jaise who koi aasmani mukhlooq ho. …………………………………. Door kaheen barish apne poore zor-o-shor se burus rehi thi. Her teref siref barish ke burusne ka shor tha. Woh khirki main khuri bahir undheron main khoi huwi thi. Us ke baal ab bhi bhikre huwe they…aur kupron per surkhi numayan thi. Gulehri us ke saath hi khuri thi…Us nain jhuk ker use apne bazuon main liya aur us ke ghunne baalon per apna haath pherne lugi… Us ke chehre per bhi barishain burus rehi theen…aankhon se luruzti huwi barish…. Tehrer # 10 angelfriends ye raha wo GHER JU KABHI JANNAT HUA kerta tha.. jo usse bht pasand tha ..shayed is jangal ki hussan ki wajha se shayed idher ki khamoshi ki wajha se han shayed!! usko shor se hi tu chird thi.... lekin ...lekin wo ander huga bhi ya nahi... aur ye mere paon kion nahi uth rahe ab.. bas chand khadam ka hi tu fadla reh gaya hei................. shayed inko PATA hei ke wo ander nahi huga MAGER MIEN CHOR KER TU US KO YAHIEN GAYE THI .... !!! nahi eik baar phir nahi !!... abki baar nahi!!.... lekin lekin hu sakta heina ke wo ander hi hu ..bas chand khadam dor aur derwaze pe nazre jamaye hi bheta hu ..OR MERA MUNTAZIR HO ...!! usse tu mere khadmo ki aahat se hi pata chal jaya kerta tha meri amad ka..PHIR YEH DARWAZA KHULA WA KYU NAHI HAI? KAHIEN MERI DURI SAY US K DIL MIEN BASAY MERAY PIYAR PER GARD TU NAHI PER GAYE..!!. ager abke bhi mera manzil lahasil theri tu!! ye safar bhi raigha gaya tu!! ....!!. lekin ab mujh mein agey bherne ki sakat nahi hei ...mujh mien aur aabla pai ki himmat nahi hei .................lou t ao aye jane wale musafir ..dekho mien yahin hun .. tum ne kaha tha na ke "tumen thuker lage gi tu tum palat ao gi" ..dekho mein agyi hun ....DEKHO AJAO OR THAM LU MUJHE mien BHIKHARNAY lagi hun .... |
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07-21-2007, 10:00 AM
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Members Replies na Karain repleis delete kardiye jaye gai ........
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07-24-2007, 11:25 PM
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  Tasweer Kahani Mai'n Bouhat Umda Sharing Daikhnay Mai'n Aai Jo Aik Khush Aayand Baat Hay...Kuch New Writers Bhi Saamnay Aaey Hai'n Jin Ki Aamad Ki Mujhay Bouhat Khushi Hui...Result Kuch Bhi Rahay Yeh Baat ToSaamnay Aai Hay Kay Aap Sab Masha Allah Likhnay Ki Umda Salahiyat Rakhtay Hai'n...Is Ko Isi Tarha Jari Rakhiye Insha Allah Showq.O.Lagan Kay Saath Saath Mehnat Kabhi Raega'n Nahi Jati...Ab Mai'n Tehreero'n Ki Taraf Aati Hoo'n... Tehreer # 1 (Imran22 Sahib) Agar Aap Sanjeedgi Say Likhnay Ki Janib Tawajoh Dai'n To Bouhat Umdagi Say Likh Saktay Hai'n...1) Khayaal Ki Infiradiyat...4 / 1 2) Nasar Owr Bayaniya...3 / 1.5 3) Kahaani / Mazmoon...3 / 1.5 Total...10 / 4 Tehreer # 2 (Mohammad Junaid Khan Sahib) Likhnay Ki Umda Salahiyat Daikh Kar Bouhat Khushi Hui...Manjhay Huway Writers Ki Tehreero'n Ko Parhiye Owr Likhna Isi Tarha Jari Rakhiye...1) Khayal Ki Infiradiyat...4 / 2 2) Nasr Owr Bayaniya...3 / 1.5 3) Kahani / Mazmoon... 3 / 1.5 Total...10 / 5 Tehreer # 3...(Dhanak Sahiba) Likhnay Ki Salahiyat Masha Allah Mowjood Hay...Likhna Jari Rakhiye...1) Khayal Ki Infiradiyat...4 / 1.5 2) Nasr Owr Bayaniya...3 / 2 3) Kahani / Mazmoon... 3 / 1.5 Total...10 / 5 Tehreer # 4...(Khush Sahiba) Likhna Isi Tarha Jari Rakha To Insha Allah Bouhat Jald Umda Likhnay Lagai'n Gi...1) Khayal Ki Infiradiyat...4 / 1.5 2) Nasr Owr Bayaniya...3 / 1.5 3) Kahani / Mazmoon... 3 / 1.5 Total...10 / 4.5 Tereer # 5...(Kanwal Sahiba) Bila Shuba Aap Aik Umda Nasr Nigar Hai'n Owr Bouhat Acha Likhna Janti Hai'n...Aap Nay Bouhat Umdagi Say Likha Hay... 1) Khayal Ki Infiradiyat...4 / 2.5 2) Nasr Owr Bayaniya...3 / 2.5 3) Kahani / Mazmoon... 3 / 2.5 Total...10 / 7.5 Tehreer # 6 (Mainaa Sahiba) Tasweer Ki Munasibat Say Aap Nay Khoobsurti Say Tehreer Raqam Ki Hay...Aap Kay Umda Writer Honay Mai'n Koi Shak.O.Shubha Nahi...1) Khayal Ki Infiradiyat...4 / 3 2) Nasr Owr Bayaniya...3 / 2.5 3) Kahani / Mazmoon... 3 / 2.5 Total...10 / 8 Tehreer # 7 (The Mask Sahib) Bouhat Umdagi Say Aap Nay Tehreer Share Ki Hay...Khayaal Ki InfiradiyatNay Bouhat Mutasir Kiya...Tasweer Kay Hawalay Say Aik Umda Tehreer Parhnay Ko Mili... 1) Khayal Ki Infiradiyat...4 / 4 2) Nasr Owr Bayaniya...3 / 2.5 3) Kahani / Mazmoon... 3 / 2.5 Total...10 / 9 Tehreer # 8 (Noor.Al.Sabah Sahiba) Bouhat Khoobsurti Say Aap Nay Tehreer Raqam Ki Hay...Aap Umda Likhna Jaanti Hai'n...Umeed Hay Kay Yeh Silsila Isi Tarha Jari Rakhai'n Gi...1) Khayal Ki Infiradiyat...4 / 2.5 2) Nasr Owr Bayaniya...3 / 2.5 3) Kahani / Mazmoon... 3 / 2.5 Total...10 / 7.5 Tehreer # 9...(Aas Sahib) Aap Nay Tehreer Bouhat Khoobsurti Say Likhi Hay...Masha Allah Khasay Manjhay Huway Andaz Mai'n Kahani Paish Ki Hay...Bouhat Khoob...1) Khayal Ki Infiradiyat...4 / 3.5 2) Nasr Owr Bayaniya...3 / 2.5 3) Kahani / Mazmoon... 3 / 2.5 Total...10 / 8.5 Tehreer # 10 (Angel Friends Sahiba) Showq.O.Lagan Say Likhti Rahee'n To Insha Allah Bouhat Jald Mazeed Umdagi Say Likhnay Lagai'n Gi...Keep Writing...1) Khayal Ki Infiradiyat...4 / 1.5 2) Nasr Owr Bayaniya...3 / 1.5 3) Kahani / Mazmoon... 3 / 1.5 Total...10 / 4.5
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ab to agla maheena aane ko hai!!!!
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