 Re: Raaye Shumari Baraye Muqabila E Tehreer | |
Assalamualaikum wa rehmatullah-e-wa Barakatuh...
Ab main pakka musalman hoon....hurray.
Haan jee to main Ma-Badaulut aap ka qasayi...i mean judge sabit huwa hoon...aur siref do aded bakriyon...arr...i mean contestanon ko dekh ker sudme ka shikaar hoon...
Dua-e-Seher ki 'Aagehi' jahan khud main aik acha message liye huwe thi...waheen kuch tekniki khamiyan bhi numayan theen ...jaise ke First person aur second person ka proper grammatical puncuation ka sire sa na hona...perhne main thori si dushwari ka chehra mubarak dekhna pera. Doosri baat...'Aagehi' Directly ramazan ki theme per poori nahin bethti...kiyon ke Hasan sahib ki aagehi kisi bhi aur din namoodar ho sekti thi...kiyoon ke unhain Namaz se shughuf tha...Khair yeh meri raaye hai...
Handome sahib ki "Aik Ferzi aap beeti" per aate hain...."Aik Ferzi Aap Beeti" perh ker..na jane kiyoon be ikhtiyaar meri nuzrain meri kulaayi per budhi ghurhi ki terf uth gayeen....phir ehsaas huwa ke mujhe to wrist watch pehne sudiyan beeteen...char-o-nachaar computer se rujoo kiya to ehsas huwa abhi to 6 ghunte baqi hain iftari main....baap re.
Inshort..."Aik ferzi Aap beeti" ramazan ke hawale se khasi behter kawish sabit huwi...do aik jugah per author nain mizah ka rung dene ki nakam koshish bhi kee...laiken on the whole...not a bad try.
So meri bhengi nuzur main...
Dua-e-seher = 6 pts
Handsome = 7.5 pts
Kaafi hain???
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