Thread: Kirchiyo'n Say Kasheed Kartay Hai'n Khushiya'n
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Old 01-24-2007, 11:55 AM
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Default Re: '' Kirchiyo'n Say Kasheed Kartay Hai'n Khushiya'n (Part 1)
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well haya....acha lay kr chali ho.....kahani main ghaltiyan to bay shumaar hain but choonk tum afsanay ki bunat say baqaaida waqif nahi ho isliye ye boht ziyada tareef ka mustahiq hay,,,,,isay perhnay main kuch time laga hay but poora perh liya hay

aik bari ghalti ki wazaaht kerdon k rija k baba ko to tum nay maar diya tha,,,,,,,
Us Din Ghar Mai'n Eid Ka Sama'n Tha Jab Firasat Nay Apni Tankhuah Ka Draft Bhaija..Mairi Badd'Naseebi Kay Usi Din Amma'n Ka Khat Aa'Gaya Kay Abba Is Duniya Say Rukhsat Ho Gaey...

laikin page no 8 main

Laikin Mai'n Bhala Kaisay Jaati Kay Mairay Sar Par To Abba Ka Thanda Larazta Huwa Haath Dhara Tha Owr Un Ka Woh Toot'ta Laihja Mairay Kano'n Mai'n Goonjta Rehta Tha '' Bitya! Maira Sar Na Jhukana ''

Mai'n Bhala Waha'n Ja Kar Apnay Bad'Naseeb Marhoom Baap Ko Yeh Taana Kis Tarha Dil'Wati Kay BaitiTalaaq Lay Kar Waapas Aa Gai Hay...Amma'n Ko Kaisay Batati Kay Un Ki Nazo'n Ki Pali Baiti Par Aik Aik Pal Kis Tarha Beeta..Mairi Baiwa Amma'n Aik Owr Sadma Kis Tarha Saihtee'n...

main tum nay baba ko phir zinda krdiya hay,,,,,,

haya is ka matlab hy k tum kahani ko bina soachay samjhay likhti chali gaee ho,,,cuz ye ghalti aisi nahi hy k isay miswriting samjha jaaiy,,,,is k ilawa jahan kahani wazaaht ka taqaaza krti hy wahan tum khamosh hojati ho or jahan kahani main khamosh rahnay ki zaroorat hoti hay wahan tum wazaaht shuro krdayti hay,,,,,,,,,mera tumhain yehi mashwara hay pehlay mukhtasir likho jab us pr dastras hojaaiy to tweel likhna,,,,kahani boht hi umda lag rahi hay but tumhari maharat hi isay is ka haqeeqi husn day sakti hay,,,,
agar main afsanay k funni taqaazon ko balaaiy taaq rekh kr is afsanay pr tabsar keron to bila shuba boht umda or dilchasp kahani hay,,,,
daikhtay hain k rija k saath ab is perdais main kiya banti hay...na piya raha or na baabul:(
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