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Nazm kee pasandeedgi ka bayhadd shukriya Tahir,

Acha laga tumhara reply daikh ker,

Aatif

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janab bahout he khooob likhi hay...zabar10..
keep on sharing

Inam ji ,

aap kaa javaab paRh kar bohat hairaangee hu'ee. bahar.haal maiN aap ke javaab meiN aik chhotee see baat kehnaa chaahooN gee agar "qubool uftaad".

aap ne bajaa farmaayaa ke aazaad nazm radeef/qaafiye kee baNdish se aazaad hoti hai TAA.HUM uss aazaad nazm meiN aik khaas metet/behr kaa khaas khayaal rakhaa jaataa hai.

aap ne Rashid aur faiz kaa havaalaa diyaa hai tau maiN aap ko Rashid kee aik aazaad nazm kee taqtee' kar ke bataatee hooN,

:MuskaraahateN by Rashid, jis kaa meter/vazn ye hai:

muskaraahateN = faa.i.laa.t (2121)

ab agar aap iss pooree nazm ko iss meter meiN taqtee' kareN tau aap deikheN ge ye pooree nazm issee meter ya'nee faa.i.laa.t par mabni hai.

rahi baat nasrii nazm kee tau boh bhee aazaad hi hoti hai magar chooNke uss meiN kisee meter/vazn kaa khayaal nahiN rakhaa jaataa hai iss liye use nasri kehte heiN.

umeed hai ke baat aap ki samajh meiN aa jaa'e gee.

shukriya
Naheed

Aatif ji,

aap ke javaab kaa be.had shukriya!
maiN tau khud abhee seekhane ke amal se guzar rahi hooN magar jo jaanti hooN voh maiN dosroN se share karnaa chaahatee hooN taa ke log mislead hone se bach jaa'eN.

aap kee nazm kaa meter/vazn hai: ma.faa.ee.lun (1222)
aap kee ye pooree nazm issi meter par fit aatee hai aur bilkul behr meiN hai sivaa'e chaNd aik maqaamaat ke.
voh ye haiN ke aap ne iss nazm meiN jahaaN jahaaN bhee :tere, mere, meree, teree: iste'maal kiyaa hai, uss ko :mire, tire, miree, tiree: kar deiN tau phir ko'ee masla' naheeN hai.

ummeed hai ko'ee baat naa.gavaar na lagee ho gee.

shukriya
Naheed

Salam Naheed jee!

Bayhaddd shukriya behar batanay ka, aur main ne Taairay, Mairay ko Tery, mairy (without nuqtay) hee istemaal kiya hai.

Aap se bohat kuch seekhnay ka mauqa millay ga,

Bohat nawazish ,,

Aatif

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Thanx a lot Aamir for ur reply n appreciation @};- @};-

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Boaht shukriya nazm kee pasandeedgi k liya Kanwal behna,

Jeeti RAho,

Aatif

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bohut achay Atif bhai @};- .... beautiful @};-

Bohat shukreya Naheed ji, muggey is ka ilm na tha. Ab jo is tor sey nazm ki taqtee kerta hon to aap ki baat samag mein aati hey. Is hawaley sey mein ney aik aor baat note ki hey wo ye k ye aasool bhe baz mustanad shora ney aessi pabandi sey istamal nahein keya. Maslan Iftikhar Aarif ki aik nazm (Sarey Manzar Aik Tara K Hotey Hein) deykheye, is mein unhon ney baz jagon per is sey gurez bhe keya hey, us per Faiz sb ka tabsara ye hey k buneyadi tor per Nazm mein aehmeyat Aahang aor mosiqeyat ki hey, ye Aahang Aaroos ki pabandi sey peyda keya jaye ya harfon ki koe aor terteeb ikhteyar ki jaye, jaaiz hey. Is ki daleel wo ye deytey hein k mukhtalif zubanon mein aaroos k meyaar mukhtalif hein, goya logon ney apni apni zubanon mein Aahang ko harfon ki mukhtalif tarakeeb mein deryaft keya. Ham urdu mein arbi aaroos ko samney rakhtey hein, leykin agar us sey kuch gurez ker k bhe wo Aahang aor mosiqeyat peyda kerney ki gunjahish ho to ussey aaroos k meyar per parakhney ki zarurat nahein.
Faryaad Ki Koe Ley nahein Hey
Nala Paband-e-Ney nahein Hey
Leykin is sey ye murad bhe nahein k sidhe sadhe nasr likh di jaye. Aap ka is barey mein keya kheyal hey.

Aadab

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