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This is a discussion on Teri Berukhi Tau Zeher Nahi within the Urdu Poet Club forums, part of the Urdu Poetry category; aik aur jasarat banday ki, aap ki feedback aur comments ka intizar rahay ga. TERI BERUKHI TAU ZEHER NAHI MERI ...
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#1
02-29-2008, 07:01 AM
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aik aur jasarat banday ki, aap ki feedback aur comments ka intizar rahay ga. TERI BERUKHI TAU ZEHER NAHI MERI BEBASI MERI MAUT HAI TERI BERUKHI TAU ZEHER NAHI HER WADA HAI WAFA YAHAN YE DIL HAI TERA SHEHER NAHI HAN TU KEON LOT KAR AYE GA IK KAFLA HUN MEIN MANZIL NAHI JAHAN KHUSBO HO CHARON AUR YE WO CHAMAN NAHI GULISTAN NAHI AB HAR TARAF IK SANATA IK KHAMSHI CHAI HAI IK MELA THA JAHAN YEA WO SHEHAR NAHI YE TERAY HI QADMON KI CHAP HAI SHAYED MAGAR YE MERI GALI NAHI MERA MAKAN NAHI MERI BEBASI MERI MAUT NAHI TERI BERUKHI TAU ZEHER NAHI Ab KOI WADA NAHI WAFA YAHAN YEA GAUR HAI.. DIL NAHI.. TERA SHEHER NAHI..         |
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#2
02-29-2008, 07:30 PM
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 nice try... lekin ghazal maiN qafiye radeef ki pabandi karni hoti hai.. so is janib tawajja dijiye.. khush rahiye
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02-29-2008, 07:48 PM
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AoA achi koshish hai, lekin jesa ke kanch ki mahroo sahiba ne kaha tou mai bhi yehi kahoon ga ke ghazal mai jo tasalsul hona chahiye, beech mai woh qayim nahi raha. baharhaal thori si mazeed mehnat se aap ke qalam mai mazeed nikhaar aa sakta hai 1.gif ")1")
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03-04-2008, 03:34 PM
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v.nice!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!! |
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