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RulesThis is a discussion on Raye shumari baraye muqabla-e-ghazal goi *Mazahiya*.. (Oct.07) within the Urdu Poet Club forums, part of the Urdu Poetry category; is maah muqabla-e-ghazal goi humaisha say kuch mukhtalif tha.. k is martaba misra-e-tarah nahiN diya gaya... balkay sho'ra ko aik ...
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#1
10-22-2007, 09:31 PM
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 is maah muqabla-e-ghazal goi humaisha say kuch mukhtalif tha.. k is martaba misra-e-tarah nahiN diya gaya... balkay sho'ra ko aik mozu diya gaya jispar mazahiya ghazal kehni thi.. shayad isi wajha say is martaba bohat kam sho'ra ne muqablay maiN shirkat ki... behrhaal.. hum tamam shurka k shukr guzar haiN.. 1.gif ")1") nataij ka ailan judges ke mushtarka faislay par mabni hoga...judges say guzarish hai k woh 31st Oct. tak humaiN apne faislay say agah kar daiN...judges har kawish ko 1-10 tak marks day saktay haiN... humaray Mohtaram judges k naam darj-e-zail haiN; ( Kanch ki Mehroo, WanderingThoughts, Sohail Malik, Mehtab, saahir) Evalutaion ka criteria yeh hai; Behr aur Wazn = 4 andaaz-e-bayaN, Rawani, Takayyul, alfaaz ka ist'emal = 6 total marks = 10 muqablay maiN shamil ghazlaiN yeh haiN; 1: m a natiq  --------------------------------------------------- 2: mdimran_ansari  --------------------------------------------------- 3: Anis Hassan MAIN HI HAR EID PAY KIYOUN BHAIJOUN USAY CARD BHALA IS BARAS TU USAY MERAY LIYAY SENDER KAR DAY BEY-RUKHI US KI SAHOUN AUR KAHAN TAK MAALIK US KAY DIL KO ZARA MERAY LIYAY TENDER KAR DAY YEH AJAB KHEL HAI AADAB AJAB HAIN IS KAY ISHQ MEIN JEET HAI USKI JO SURRENDER KAR DAY KAAM ZIYADA HAIN BUHAT AUR BUHAT THORA HAI WAQT AYE KHUDA MERAY LIYAY AUR CALENDER KAR DAY --------------------------------------------------- 4: Zeneya Eid ka din hay shaitano.n ki rehaye ho gi Aor dukan.daro.n ki zoo afzood kamai ho gi Jo bhi ramzan mai khanay pe rahay sharminda Un ki ankhon mai shabih-e-halwai ho gi Tou hay suraj tujhay maloom kahan raat ka dukh Tou meray gahr mai utar khub pitai ho gi Hue mah-e-ramza,n mai muflis-o-qalash sabhi Per pakoray ki aik tray sab ne sajai ho gi Eid ka chand bhala kab usko nazar ana tha Kharche ki lambi list jise begum ne thamai ho gi Sawaiyan kha kha ke pait phat na gaye kaheen Donga-o-martaba.n ne di ye duhai ho gi Hum ne masjid se uraye hain eid ki jootay Kise dushman ne ye be-par ki uraye ho gi Hum ko her lehza ye ahsas-e-zaya.n rehta hay Bee parosan ne ghazab kheer pakai ho gi Meray Allah burai se bachana mujh ko Roz-e-mehshar wagarna khub khichaye ho gi --------------------------------------------------- sab se guzarish hai k Judges k ilawa koi aur member is thread maiN post na karay, Judges k ilawa koi bhi post delete kar di jaye gi. bohat shukriya khush rahiye HG Intazamiya.
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#2
10-24-2007, 11:22 PM
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Aik bat... jo yahaN wazeh karna hum zaroori samajhtay haiN... k jo sho'ra muqablay maiN shirkat nahiN karna chahtay... woh apna kalaam muqablay ki thread maiN share na karaiN... muqablay ki thread maiN share karnay ka matlab hai muqablay maiN hissa laina... so... shirkat na karnay k khahishmand sho'ra apna kalaam alag thread maiN lagayeN.. khush rahiye HG Administration. |
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#3
10-31-2007, 08:54 PM
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as-salam-o-alaikum dosto, is bar mazahiya muqabla-e-ghazal ka in'iqaad kiya gya tha, 4 members ne shmliyat ki, jis se andaza hota hy k ham meN se koi to his's-e-mazah rakhta hy...  kuch masroofiat ki waja se ujlat meiN marking kr raha huN umeed hy ap derguzer kreN gy...1: m a natiq jnab ap ki gahzal achi rahi, mazah ka anser to khoob raha mager wazn meiN improvement ki zuroorat hy ap ki gahzal ko milty haiN: Behr aur Wazn = ---- andaaz-e-bayaN, Rawani, Takayyul, alfaaz ka ist'emal = 4 total marks = 4 2: mdimran_ansari jnab aap ki kawish bhi khoob rahi, mager paRhny meiN bohat dushwari ka samna karna paRa, aur aik bar to ye bhi khyal aaya k is dushwari ka samna krwany pr aik do marks kaat luN... khair, ap ki ghazal meiN bhi mazah to kafi tha, mager wohi bat k wazn pr aur ghazal ki baqi technicalities pr bohat ziada twaju ki zurooat hyap ki gahzal ko milty haiN: Behr aur Wazn = ---- andaaz-e-bayaN, Rawani, Takayyul, alfaaz ka ist'emal = 3 total marks = 3 3: Anis Hassan Anis bhai ap ki kawish bohat achi rahi, go k sirf pehly sher meiN Eid ka zikr aya, mager baqi sheroN meiN bhi acha mazah dala... ap ki gahzal ko milty haiN: Behr aur Wazn = 4 andaaz-e-bayaN, Rawani, Takayyul, alfaaz ka ist'emal = 4 total marks = 8 4: Zeneya Zeneya sahiba aap ne bohat achi kawish pesh ki, wazn kahiN kahiN disturb hua mager achy shair kahy, acha mazah paida kiya apny lafzoN se... ap ki gahzal ko milty haiN: Behr aur Wazn = 2 andaaz-e-bayaN, Rawani, Takayyul, alfaaz ka ist'emal = 4 total marks = 6 ------------------------------------------------------------------------------ aap sab dostoN ki participation ka bohat bohat shukriya.....
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#4
11-01-2007, 01:02 AM
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1: m a natiq behr aur wazan=0 deegar=3 total=3 2: mdimran_ansari behr aur wazan= 0 deegar=3 total=3 3: Anis Hassan behr aur wazan=4 deegar=4.5 total=8.5 4: Zeneya behr aur wazan=1.5 deegar=4 total=5.5 aap tamam sathiyoN ki shirkat ka bohat shukriya.. khush rahiye |
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#5
11-01-2007, 02:25 PM
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shurakaae muqabila ko salam or takheeri eid mubarik..wesay iswqt shumaar bandi ki tareekh guzar chuki hay...chon kay abhi thread band nahi hoi hay to main nay socha kay shumar bandi kr dayni chahiye, gar chay khilaf e qaaida hay,, m a natiq natiq sahb aap nay koshish to boht achi ki hay laikin bahr ki mashq ki boht ziyada zaroort hay.laikin chon kay aik roo phir bhi moajood hay is liye baihr main 1 # milna chahiye baihr =4/1 taghazzul/jamaliyat =6\3 total =10\4 mdimran ansari janab aap bhi bahr main rah gaaiy hain..koshish boht achi thi,,chatkhara tha zuban ka baihr =4/0 taghazzul/jamaliyat =6\3 total =10\3 anees husain aap bay panah daad kay mustahiq hain..boht khoob kaha hay,,khas toar pr qafiya paimaae khoob ki hay,jis rawani say ghair manooz qafiye likhay hain wo baypanah daad ka mustahiq hay. baihr =4/3 taghazzul/jamaliyat =6\6 total =10\9 zenya zenya nay boht hayraan kiya..kaheen to wazn sonay kay bhaao pora hay or kaheen taanbay kay bhao..laikin deegar khasoosiyat in kay haan sab say umda rahi hain baihr =4/2 taghazzul/jamaliyat =6\5 total =10\7 shukria |
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#6
11-02-2007, 04:46 PM
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sab judges ki marking ka bohat shukria, ab ye thread close ki jati hy, jald hi winner ki announcement ki thread laga di ja'ay gi... |
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