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This is a discussion on ra'ay shumari - muqabla-e-Nazm goi June 08 within the Urdu Poet Club forums, part of the Urdu Poetry category; As-salam-o-alaikum Dosto! is bar kehta hy kya ye manzer... (Muqabla-e-nazm goi, Jun-08) k liay image muntakhib kiya gya tha: hmaiN ...
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#1
06-23-2008, 10:48 PM
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As-salam-o-alaikum Dosto! is bar kehta hy kya ye manzer... (Muqabla-e-nazm goi, Jun-08) k liay image muntakhib kiya gya tha:  hmaiN bohat khushi hy k is baar bhi aap sab ne dilchaspi se is silsily meiN hisa liya aur hmaiN bohat si khubsurat nazmeN paRhny ko mileiN. aap janty haiN k winner ka faisla judges ki mushtarika ra'ay se hota hy, to maiN Urdu Poet Club k qabil judges se derkhawst kruN ga k wo is thread meiN 30th June 2008 tak hmaiN apny faisloN se aagah kreN. Judges meiN shamil haiN: (Sohail Malik, Saraabs, Anis Hasan, Zehrab, Aatif Saeed, Kanch ki Mehroo & WanderingThoughts) marking ka criteria ye hy: Andaz-e-beyan (5 marks) (rawani, alfaz ka ista'amal, takhayyul) manzer se insaf (5 marks) total marks = 10 ====== NOTE: ====== ye thread sirf judges k liay hy, judges k elawa kisi bhi member ki post delete kr di ja'ay gi. .
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#2
06-23-2008, 10:52 PM
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muqably meiN shamin nazmeN ye haiN: 1 - ridz Tanhai ... Sham dhaltay hi chiragoo ko bhujaya hay main nain phir teri yadoon ka diyya bhi jalaya hay main nain kabhi kitaab ki satroon main uljhaya hay main nain tu kabhi khud ko manzer sy anjan bnaya hay main nain Her moor pay her kahani main tum mill jaatay hoo Tum nahi ho kahiin phir dair talak khud ko samjhaya hay main nain Last edited by WanderingThoughts; 06-24-2008 at 04:33 AM. |
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#3
06-23-2008, 10:55 PM
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2 - chalatmusafir EK INTAZAR kis rut kee dua le kar, tere aane ki aas aabad karoN kis shaam ka karoN sawera kis dhoop se faryaad karoN maiN aas ki tuti naao liye, sard mausam maiN teri raah takoN jheel, kinare bat kareN kitaboN sang nibah karun mausam ek sarmaya hai jakar phir kab aaya hai qadmoN maiN apne khaar lye phooloN ke din yaad karoN ek aas sajaye bethe haiN kon sa mausam ayega jab dur, usi shjr tale tera hath pakad aram karoN |
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#4
06-23-2008, 10:56 PM
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3 - autam meen Ore Meri Tunhai Aaoo Meri Tunhai! ]aaoo Hum Donoo Chaleen Oss Jaga Par Jis Jagah Koi Na Hoo Ore Hum Phir Sunn Sakeen Ik Dujhee Ki Sadaa Ore Sawaan Ke Mast Musaam Meen Meen Par Sakoon Muhabat Ki Kitab (par=read) Aaoo Hum Donoo Chaleen Un Paharoon Ki Taraf ( Paharoon=hills) Aesee Vadi Meen Jahaan Koi Na Hoo Jisko Basaeen Hum Chalker...... Hum Milkar Aooo Meri Tunhai !! Hum Donoo Chaleen !!! |
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#5
06-23-2008, 10:58 PM
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4 - faridnawaz khud parast larki aaj musaam bhi piyara piyara hee aaj sawaan ki hawa ka raqs bhi hee aaj samaan bhi nikhraa nikhraa hee aaj inn meen tumharaa aqass bhi hee aaj badal bhi kuch gehree heen aaj naoo pe bethi ik larki hee ju sunder sunder lagti hee ju deer tak dil meen thehri hee ju kitaoon meen uljhi uljhi heee ye oss ki raam kahani heee ju tunha tunha bethi hee jesee zarurat hee dosti ki jis ki matti hee piyar wali jis ka pekar hee ishq parwar jis ke hontoon meen rass buhoot hee jis ke pekar ki saltanat meen gharor bhi hee,supurdagi bhi jis ke pehloo ki lazatoon meen nishaat bhi hee fusurdagi bhi sakoot bhi hee rawaniyaan bhi jis ki ankhoon ke khab saree faqat osee ki muntazir heen ju apnee pekar meen aap gum heee Last edited by WanderingThoughts; 06-24-2008 at 04:32 AM. |
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#6
06-23-2008, 11:00 PM
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5- danmurfi Nostalgia wo ik khamosh si larki wafa kay sahilon par waqt ki nao mein bethi soch mein gum hai kitab e zeest kay jo warq paltay hain to mazi kay dhundhalkon sey kayi chehrey, kayi yadein ubhar kar jagmagati hain usey yeh ilm, yadon kay saharey umr to guzra nahin karti magar yeh khud faramoshi! gham e dauran sey kuch pal jab churati hai to janey kitney barson ki thakan aankhon mein aati hai tabhi woh sabr, jo sail e rawan ko rok leta hai Asasa hai... kayi bay naam jazbon ka kayi anjaan rishton ka jo dil mein reh gayi us khush gumani ka Kahani ka... jo likhkhi thi wafa kay rahrawon ney bey khabar anjam sey ho kar Usey ik shajar e saya dar banna tha k jiski chhaon mein aakar zamaney bhar ki sari shiddatein bhi maand par jateen Ghata ban kar barasna tha jisey banjar zameenon par, unhein zarkhaiz karna tha woh gumgushta muhabbat is jahan par raj karney keliye nikli to thi laikin riwajon kay andheron mein najaney kis taraf bhatki sabhi mausam bohat bay kaif kar daley to in bay rang yadon ke saharey umr woh kesey guzarey gi wo apni jaan sey haarey gi Last edited by WanderingThoughts; 06-24-2008 at 04:15 AM. |
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#7
06-29-2008, 09:39 PM
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ridz Andaz-e-beyan (5 marks) (rawani, alfaz ka ista'amal, takhayyul): 1 manzer se insaf (5 marks): 1 Total: 2 chaltamusafir Andaz-e-beyan (5 marks) (rawani, alfaz ka ista'amal, takhayyul): 2 manzer se insaf (5 marks): 2 Total: 4 autam Andaz-e-beyan (5 marks) (rawani, alfaz ka ista'amal, takhayyul): 1 manzer se insaf (5 marks): 2 Total: 3 faridnawaz Andaz-e-beyan (5 marks) (rawani, alfaz ka ista'amal, takhayyul): 2 manzer se insaf (5 marks): 2 Total: 4 danmurfi Andaz-e-beyan (5 marks) (rawani, alfaz ka ista'amal, takhayyul): 4 manzer se insaf (5 marks): 4.5 Total: 8.5
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