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**WanderingThoughts** · #1 05-23-2008, 04:07 PM

As-salam-o-alaikum Dosto!

is bar muqabla-e-Terhi Ghazal k liay misra tajweez kiya gya tha:

: Wafa mai ab yeh hunar ikhtiyaar karna hai :

hmaiN bohat khushi hy k is baar bhi aap sab ne dilchaspi se is silsily meiN hisa liya aur hmaiN bohat si khubsurat ghazleN paRhny ko mileiN.

aap janty haiN k winner ka faisla judges ki mushtarika ra'ay se hota hy, to maiN Urdu Poet Club k qabil judges se derkhawst kruN ga k wo is thread meiN 30th May tak hmaiN apny faisloN se aagah kreN.

Judges meiN shamil haiN:

(Sohail Malik, Saraabs, Anis Hasan, Zehrab, Aatif Saeed, Kanch ki Mehroo & WanderingThoughts)

marking ka criteria ye hy:

Behr aur Wazn = 4

andaaz-e-bayaN, Rawani, Takay'yul, alfaaz ka istamal = 6

total marks = 10

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NOTE:

ye thread sirf judges k liay hy, judges k elawa kisi bhi member ki post delete kr di ja'ay gi.

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**WanderingThoughts** · #2 05-23-2008, 04:12 PM

Muqablay meiN shamil members k nam aur un ki kawishaat derj zail haiN:

1- sohail2008

2- faridnawaz

کچھ ذکر حسن کچھ یاد یار کرنا ھے
بے کار زندگی کو مصروف کا ر کرنا ھے
چشم نم سے بھی عیاں راز نہ ہونے پاے
وفا میں اب یہ ھنر ا ختیار کرنا ھے
تمام ھمسفروں نے تو پا لیں منزلیں اپنی
فریب مجھ سے مقدر نے ھر بار کرنا ھے
ًًمیرے محبوب نظر ,،میرے مسجود خیال
جو زخم تو نے دیے، انکو شمار کرنا ھے
یہ جانتا ھوں آپ نہ آئیں گے میرے پاس
پھر بھی نجانے کیوں تیرا انتظار کرنا ھے
جب بھی کوئ حسین سر راہ مل گیا
اس پے گماں کیوں شکل یار کرنا ھے
وعدے پہ آئیں گے وہ نواز یقین جانو
صبرآزما ہیں گھڑیاں کچھ انتظار کرناھے

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3- mdimran_ansari

ڈوب آگ کے در یا کو پار کرنا ہے
ہر ایک دستور زمانہ کو تار کرنا ہے
وفا میں اب یہ ہنر اختیار کرنا ہے
خود اپنے ہی قاتل سے پیار کرنا ہے
نگا ہ ناز کے تیروں کے مقابل ھے جگر
کتنے لگتے ہیں کس نے شمار کرنا ہے
گھنیری زلف کی شوخ بجلیوں کی قسم
ھے آشیانہ میرا جہاں تونے وار کرنا ہے
اس کا ایک بھی وعدہ وفا ھوا نہ کبھی
مزاج دلگیر کو مگر اعتبار کرنا ہے
گلوں میں رنگ بہاروں کی آمدیں عمران
میرا نصیب مجھے انتظار کرنا ہے

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4- mujahid khan

agar wafa mey tujeh kaarubaar karna hai
ye maire jism ke tukrde hazaar karna hai

wahi milega jo maango khudaa se dil se aap
bassus ka shukr adaa baar baar karna hai

jafa nahi ye khata hai tho mai'n ne maaf kia
magar gila tho mujeh phhir bhi yaar karna hai

sununga abb mey jo aawaaz maire di ki ho
wafa mey abb ye hunar ikhtiyaar karna hai

jo teer mairi nigaaho'n ke teerkush mey hai
ye teer dik ke tere aar paar karna hai

ye khat miley jo mera iss ko choom laina aur
qareeb dil ke zara aik baar karna hai

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5- 13 Mera 7 Rhey

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6- mobi91

humeiN to ishq mein sab kuch nisaar karna hai
apne khuN ko sham�-e-koo-e-yaar karna hai

yaadeiN le rahi haiN rukhsat mere khayaaloN se
bohot hi naaz se inko sawaar karna hai

mile mujhe kahiN qaatil mera kahuN us se
mujhe utaar yeh apna udhaar karna hai

na aaye yaad teri aur na hi tu aaye
mujhe fuzool meiN kiuN beqarar karna hai

khayal hai abhi dil meiN daraaz qaamat ka
yeh kehdo us se mujhe intezaar karna hai

mujh sheeshagar ko rah-e-sang se guzarna hai
wafa meiN ab yeh hunar ikhtiyar karna hai

nikal gaya tha maiN bin dhaal shehr-e-yaar mein kal
nahin khabar thi ke usko bhi waar karna hai

teri gali to bohot duur hai magar jaana
teri gali hi ko ab rahguzaar karna hai

hai humko shouqe bhi kuch zakhm aur iiza ka
ye tere teer ko seene ke paar karna hai

"Mudabbar" baat bhi karte hain ab yeh khanjar ki
akela tu hai jise ab bhi pyar karna hai

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7- mazhar naqvi

wafa main ab yay hunar ikhtiar karna hay
diyay ke lo' ko hawaon say piar karna hay

udas hona hay khud bhi teri judai per
tujhay bhi abb kay bohat bayqarar karna hy

tamam umr ye karwat nahin badalni hy
tamam umr tera intizar karna hay

ye gham nahin ky hmain phir faraib he ho ga
ghazab to ye hay tera aitbaar karna hay...

chamk rahay hain charagon ki ankh main ansoo
hawa ko aaj bohat sogwar karna hay........

andhairi jheel hy,khamoshian hain,jungle hay
or jugnuon pe mujhay inhisaar karna hay

aboor karna hay ik rasta musafir ko
or aik fasala sooraj ko paar karna hay

adoo ki taigh ko taskheer kar lia main nay
ab apny khun ki khushbo sy waar krna hy

ye keh rha hy hawa ka mizaj patjhar say
kay janglon main bapa intishar karna hay

zaban dayni hay ya dil udas naslon ko
ye faisla bhi sere shakh e daar karna hay

khulay huay hain sabhi ablon ky mu'n mazhar``
lahoo ko raqss e sir e nok e khaar karna hay....

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8- vibhavan

wafa mein ab ye hunar ikhtiyar karna hai
woh bewafa hi sahi,phir bhi pyar karna hai

balandiyon pe mere housale hon, mere khuda
khizan ki rut ko badalkar bahar karna hai

unki ahat hameysha gunjati hai aangan mein
tamam umr hamein intazar karna hai

woh dur ho to khatakti hai judai unki
woh paas ho to shikwe hazar karna hai

woh din ko raat bhi kah dein to koi baat nahin
hamara kya hai hamein eitbaar karna hai

hamari neende udana tumhara kaam sahi
hamara shagl bhi taare shumar karna hai

qadam qadam pe teri rahmaton ka saya ho
qadam qadam pe tujhe hamkinar karna hai

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9- danmurfi

jamaal e yar ko ab aashkar karna hai
khizan raseeda chaman ko bahar karna hai

"wafa mein ab yeh hunar ikhtiar karna hai"
tumhari yad sey dil waguzar karna hai

merey khilaf saf aara hein yar bhi merey
to sochta hoon mujhey kis pe war karna hai

isi zameen ki nisbat sey mu`tabir thehrey
isi zameen` ko hamein lalazar karna hai

jo ahl e dil hain usey shairy bhi manein gey
hamein to tazkira e husn e yar karna hai

yeh kya kamal ke yaron pe jan ho qurban
maza to jab hai adoo sey bhi pyar karna hai

wo jis kay honey sey sara jahan mera tha
jahan sara usi par nisar karna hai

jo teri bazm mein kartey hain dawa e ulfat
meri wafa ney unhein sharmsar karna hai

wisaal e yar ki khatir muheeb darya ko
ghara hai kachcha to kya phir bhi par karna hai

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10- Saukhta_Jaan

Nihan hai jo bhi yahan aashkar karna hai
hadon mein rakhna nahin beykinar karna hai

hua na kuch bhi buhat khak ura kay daikh liya
ab us ki raah mein khud ko ghubar karna hai

nidhal kar diya is hijr ki musaafat nay
aur aagay dast-e-rafaqat bhi paar karna hai

hamaray dil ki bhi tauqeer kuch khulay us par
"wafa mein ab yeh hunar ikhtiar karna hai"

naey siray say jala kar diyay umeedon kay
ab un kay gird hawa ka hisaar karna hai

kara hai marhala darpaish aur us pay sitam
keh apnay aap par ab aitebaar karna hai

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11- silent_wishes

"wafa maiN ab yeh hunar ikhtiyaar kerna hai"
jo pyar mujh se karay uss se pyar kerna hai

khushi maiN jis ki bhula bhet-thaa tha apnay gham
usii ko ab ke bohot beqaraar kerna hai

hai kaun jis ko kahooN aithbaar ke qabil?
kisi pe kiya! apnay pe aithbaar kerna hai!

maiN kis ke dar pe chalooN? kiya samajataiN kerlooN?
khazaaN jo dil mian hai uss ko bahaar kerna hai!

woh ab ke jesay kabhi saamnay na ayega
hamesha chupkay hi se uss ne waar kerna hai

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12- chalatmusafir

wafaa maiN ab ye hunar ekhtayaar karna hai
dil kee lagee zabaaN se ezhaar karna hai

sitaaroo se aage phir banayeN ge jahaN
pahle diloN ko hamwaar karna hai

dil tang huye to ghar kushada hogay
bacho ki aahat ka ab intazaar karna hai

bisaat e bakht ki chaal samajh saka na koi
bekar apnee tez raftaar karna hai

kab bahee hai hawa mange ki rut per
ek din to naao is paar,uspaar karna hai

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**sohailmalik64** · #3 05-24-2008, 08:43 PM

Azeez dosto

salaam!

is baar bhi muqaabilay maiN kaee naey saathi dekhnay maiN ayay. kuch nay achaa likhaa aur kuch ko abhee mehnet ki zaruret hay. meri taraf say ki gaee marking kuch yuN hay.

1. sohail2008 0 + 2 = 2
2. faridnawaz 0 + 2 = 2
3. imran ansari 1+ 3 = 4
4. mujahid khan 2 + 3 = 5
5. ali 0 + 2 = 2
6. mobi 91 3 + 3 = 6
7. mazhar naqvi 4 + 5 = 9
8. vibhaam 3 + 4 = 7
9. danmarfi 3.5+3.5=7
10. soukhtajan 4 + 4.5= 8.5
11. silent wishes 3 + 3 = 6
12 chalatmusafir 0 + 2 = 2

sohail malik

**Aatif Saeed** · #4 05-28-2008, 12:33 AM

1. sohail2008 0.5 + 2.5 = 3
2. faridnawaz 0 + 2.5 = 2.5
3. imran ansari 1.5+ 3 = 4.5
4. mujahid khan 2 + 4 = 6
5. 13 Mera 7 Rhey 0 + 1.5 = 1.5
6. mobi 91 3 + 3 = 6
7. mazhar naqvi 4 + 5.5 = 9.5
8. vibhaam 3 + 3 = 6
9. danmarfi 4 + 4.5 = 8.5
10. soukhtajan 4 + 4.5= 8.5
11. silent wishes 3 + 3 = 6
12 chalatmusafir 0 + 2 = 2

**zehrab** · #5 05-31-2008, 10:37 PM

1. sohail2008 1 + 3 = 4
2. faridnawaz 1+ 2 = 3
3. imran ansari 1+ 1.5 = 2.5
4. mujahid khan 2 + 2 = 4
5. 13 Mera 7 Rhey 1+ 1 = 2
6. mobi 91 2+ 2 = 4
7. mazhar naqvi 4 + 6 = 10
8. vibhaam 2 + 2 = 4
9. danmarfi 4 + 4 = 8
10. soukhtajan 4 + 4.5= 8.5
11. silent wishes 2 + 2 = 4
12 chalatmusafir 1+ 2 = 3
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**Saraabs** · #6 06-01-2008, 07:13 PM

HG Kay Dosto! Assalam-o-Alaikum.

Muqabla-e-tarhi ghazal ki marking main takheer per ma�zrat qubool kijye. Marking darj-e-zail hai.

1. sohail2008: 0 + 2 = 2

2. faridnawaz: 0 + 3 = 3

3- mdimran_ansari: 0.5 + 3 = 3.5

4- mujahid khan: 3.5 + 3 = 6.5

5- 13 Mera 7 Rhey: 0 + 1 = 1

6- mobi91: 2 + 4 = 6

7- mazhar naqvi: 3.7 + 5.8 = 9.5

8- vibhavan: 2.5 + 4.5 = 7

9- danmurfi: 4 + 5 = 9

10- Saukhta_Jaan: 4 + 5.3 = 9.3

11- silent_wishes: 3 + 3 = 6

12- chalatmusafir: 0+1=1

**WanderingThoughts** · #7 06-02-2008, 04:52 PM

aap sab judges ka bohat bohat shukriya k aap ne waqt nikala aur shurakaa ki ghazloN pr marking ki...

kuch der meiN muqabla-e-terhi ghazal (May 08) k nata'ij ka ailaan kr dia ja'ay ga.

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