Urdu Poetry Forum

Asalaam Alaikum,

Is se pehlay k main apni ghazal paish keroon main yeh zaroori samajhta hoon k aap sab ko is baat se aagaah kerdoon k main koee sha'ir nahein ... Bas kuch tootay phootay alfaaz hain to ashaar ki surat main piroker paish kerdayta hoon ... Abhi to bohot kuch seekhna hai mujhay sha'iri k baray main ... Umeed kerta hoon aap log meri ghalati'on ko dar guzar ferma'aingay /happy

Dia ga'ay tarhi misray per kuch ashaar likhnay ki koshish kee hai main ne ... pasih e khidmat hai ...

Ghazal:

Kab us ne sayabaar sar pe asmaan rehnay dia
Na aabaad kia hamko na veeraan rehnday dia

Kuch pal kee khushi hee mayyassir hai zindagee
Werna to muhabbat ne masruf e fughaan rehnay dia

Maizbaani kaa hai taqaazaa yeh soch ker ham nay
Guzarte huway mehmaan ko mehmaan rehnay dia

Yeh toota huwa dil bhee unki hee inaayat hai
"Jan ker ham ne unhain nameherbaan rehnay dia"

Is nusqay se khalish dil kee mit ja’ay meri shaayad
Aansuon ko umeed main ham ne rawaan rehnay dia

Qassim ki kahaani youn milja’aygi badalon se
Iss tahreer ko us nay misl e dhu’aan rehnay dia

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Asalaam Alaikum,

Is se pehlay k main apni ghazal paish keroon main yeh zaroori samajhta hoon k aap sab ko is baat se aagaah kerdoon k main koee sha'ir nahein ... Bas kuch tootay phootay alfaaz hain to ashaar ki surat main piroker paish kerdayta hoon ... Abhi to bohot kuch seekhna hai mujhay sha'iri k baray main ... Umeed kerta hoon aap log meri ghalati'on ko dar guzar ferma'aingay /happy

Di'ay ga'ay tarhi misray per kuch ashaar likhnay ki koshish kee hai main ne ... pasih e khidmat hai ...

Ghazal:

Kab us ne sayabaar sar pe asmaan rehnay dia
Na aabaad kia hamko na veeraan rehnday dia

Kuch pal kee khushi hee mayyassir hai zindagee ko
Werna to muhabbat ne masruf e fughaan rehnay dia

Maizbaani kaa hai taqaazaa yeh soch ker ham nay
Guzarte huway mehmaan ko mehmaan rehnay dia

Yeh toota huwa dil bhee unki hee inaayat hai
"Jan ker ham ne unhain nameherbaan rehnay dia"

Is nusqay se khalish dil kee mit ja’ay meri shaayad
Aansuon ko umeed main ham ne rawaan rehnay dia

Qassim ki kahaani youn milja’aygi badalon se
Iss tahreer ko us nay misl e dhu’aan rehnay dia

Ishq ki rahoN me chalna youn hi aasan to na tha
Teree khaatir ik taraf saara jahaan rehne dia

salamz

Muskurahat kar li zakhmi ,ashk na bahnay dya
"jaan kar hum nay unhain na mahrbaan rahnay dya"

toot jaay gham ka bhi na raabta bas is liyay
dil ko gahray dard ka aadi kya, sahnay dya

aandhyaan jo chal pareen to lay gain poora shajar
jaanay phir kya sooch kar ik ghoonsla rahnay dya

taanay maarain log to ahsaas ho zinda hoon main
!s liyay logon ko apnay baaray main kahnay dya...

by :UnO$h@ NAved... /theek

<!--QuoteBegin-AjN@B! NoOr+Jan 13 2004, 01:38 PM--></div><table border='0' align='center' width='95%' cellpadding='3' cellspacing='1'><tr> <td>QUOTE (AjN@B! NoOr @ Jan 13 2004, 01:38 PM)</td></tr><tr><td id='QUOTE'><!--QuoteEBegin--> toot jaay gham ka bhi na raabta bas is liyay
dil ko gahray dard ka aadi kya, sahnay dya

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mashaallah bohat khoobsoorat khayaal hai .

teree suswaai na ho duniya me hum ne is liay
ishq ko apne faqat ik daastaaN rehne dia

<!--QuoteBegin-ahsan225+Jan 13 2004, 05:12 PM--></div><table border='0' align='center' width='95%' cellpadding='3' cellspacing='1'><tr> <td>QUOTE (ahsan225 @ Jan 13 2004, 05:12 PM)</td></tr><tr><td id='QUOTE'><!--QuoteEBegin--> <!--QuoteBegin-AjN@B! NoOr+Jan 13 2004, 01:38 PM--></div><table border='0' align='center' width='95%' cellpadding='3' cellspacing='1'><tr> <td>QUOTE (AjN@B! NoOr @ Jan 13 2004, 01:38 PM)</td></tr><tr><td id='QUOTE'><!--QuoteEBegin--> toot jaay gham ka bhi na raabta bas is liyay
dil ko gahray dard ka aadi kya, sahnay dya

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mashaallah bohat khoobsoorat khayaal hai . [/b][/quote]
:yessir thx 4 appritiating my khayal ............
aur aap ka sheer bhi gud hay ji :clapping