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Jaan ker ham ney unhei'n naa-meherbaa'n rehnay diyaa
KHud pay guzry daastaaN ko daastaaN rehnay diya



teri bewafai ka charcha hum aam kar daitay
per hum nahen baiemman so taira biyaan rehnay diya

salam dostoon
maloom nahen kay yeh misra kaisa hay . magar bass dill main aya to keh diya . main aap ki tasheeh ki muntazir rahoon gi .
aur yeh silsila kafi acha hay . aur mazay ka bhi acha laga is mai hisa lay kar
khush rahain . aur aisay hi dosroon ko khush kartay rahain
aisha khan

main raat ka hoon alam meri rangat to dekh tu
kitnay siah hotay hain tanhaeoon kay ghar..

I will complete it soon.....

Andhera meri kismat roshan sara jahan hai
jalaoon gar kisi ko jalana kaisay chahoon

Meri zindagi hai banjar koi kali khilay ge kaisay
bulaoon gar kisi ko bulana kasiay chahoon

Khafa hai sara alam ik shakhs ki khaatir
manaoon gar kisi ko manana kaisay chahoon

Main khushi ka hoon talib sataya mujhay gaya hai
sataoon gar kisi ko satana kasaiy chahoon
Taimur as Talib

AOA, chand aashaar meri taraf sey bhi

"JAAN KAR HUM NAY UNHAIN NA MEHAERBAA>N REHNEY DIYA"
wo they is main khush tu un ko shadmaa.n rehney diya

Hum nay chehrey per jami sab dhool tu dho di magar
dill pe teri bewafaai ka nishaa.n rehney diya

Hum nay sari chahatai.n unhi ko dey daalee.n magar
Aap apney app ko shola bajaa.n rehney diya

Hum nay apney dill ki sab baagai.n thama di thee.n usey
Haan magar zehan o fikar ka karwaa.n rehney diya

waqt nay tu thaan li thi hum ko khaak-aster karey
Per kisi ki yaad nay hum ko jawaa.n rehney diya

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Shagufta Saleem

/aoa

bohut umdaaa bohut achchey...qafiya wazan aur behar sari cheezon ka khayal rakhtey huwe achchi ghazal pesh ki hai...Keep it up

Allah hafiz

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iss shikasta zaat ko, uljha hoa rehnay dia [/b][/quote]
buhtu KHoob! sher yaqeenan buhut Khoobsoorat hay!

laikin GHazal kay liea qafyea zaroory hay, is Ghazal meiN qafyea "-aaN" hay
jiasay: meherbaaN, daastaaN, raazdaaN, saibaaN waGhera waGhera...

/aoa

aur radeef "rehney diya" hai

Yeh aap ney achcha kiya Nabeel mian key qafia bata diya...JazakAllah

Nain Tara jee! agar aap is qafiye radeef ka apni opening post mein zikr kar dein to naye aaney walon ko sahoolat ho jay gi.shukrya

Allah hafiz

/aoa


zindagi nay yoon to sarey zakhm dho daley magar
terey na milney ka ehsaas-e-ziyaan rehney diya

ALLAH HAFIZ

<!--QuoteBegin-danmurfiec 14 2003, 02:59 AM--></div><table border='0' align='center' width='95%' cellpadding='3' cellspacing='1'><tr> <td>QUOTE (danmurfi @ Dec 14 2003, 02:59 AM)</td></tr><tr><td id='QUOTE'><!--QuoteEBegin--> /aoa

aur radeef "rehney diya" hai

Yeh aap ney achcha kiya Nabeel mian key qafia bata diya...JazakAllah

Nain Tara jee! agar aap is qafiye radeef ka apni opening post mein zikr kar dein to naye aaney walon ko sahoolat ho jay gi.shukrya

Allah hafiz [/b][/quote]
oh han! meiN radeef ka zikr kerna tu bhool hi gya.. acha hua aap nay zikr ker dia... Jazak.Allah

aur Naina je, aap nay ye to bata dya kah qafia aur radeef kia hota hay, per ye nahiN bataya kah Ghazal kay liea qafia aur radeef zaroory haiN ab ye bhi mension ker dijyea bara-e-maharbaani

/aoa

aik aur lijeye

Haal-e-dil ashaar ki soorat bayaan to kar diya
kon tha in mein mukhatib, yeh nihaan rehney diya

Allah hafiz