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aik gazal likhnay ki himet ki hey aur dar dar k post ker rahi hoon coz mein khud ko gazal likhnay k qabil nahin samajhti baher haal islah ki talab hey so app sab apni ray ka izhaar zaroor kijiye ga


muhabbaat ki raseeli tashnagi
zaher alood sa iss ka milan
hamesha toot jaien misl-e-dil
meray hi khawab dein mujh ko chuban
jo mujh ko rakh ker k kho gaya
wo shola tha kabhi tera badan
mein chahat ki aziyat kaat ker
bayan kernay lagi apni thakan
sitaray bhar k likhti hoon jinhein
mujhay wo lafz detay hein agan
woo saray herf mein nay kho diye
tumhari zaat thi jin ka matan
ya shayad zindagee ki reet hey
jo pa loo phir nahin rehti lagan

/happy

KHoob kaha

thnx for sharing

@};-

/senior

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<!--QuoteBegin-BEWAFA+Nov 1 2003, 07:46 PM--></div><table border='0' align='center' width='95%' cellpadding='3' cellspacing='1'><tr> <td>QUOTE (BEWAFA @ Nov 1 2003, 07:46 PM)</td></tr><tr><td id='QUOTE'><!--QuoteEBegin--> aik gazal likhnay ki himet ki hey aur dar dar k post ker rahi hoon coz mein khud ko gazal likhnay k qabil nahin samajhti baher haal islah ki talab hey so app sab apni ray ka izhaar zaroor kijiye ga


muhabbaat ki raseeli tashnagi
zaher alood sa iss ka milan
hamesha toot jaien misl-e-dil
meray hi khawab dein mujh ko chuban
jo mujh ko rakh ker k kho gaya
wo shola tha kabhi tera badan
mein chahat ki aziyat kaat ker
bayan kernay lagi apni thakan
sitaray bhar k likhti hoon jinhein
mujhay wo lafz detay hein agan
woo saray herf mein nay kho diye
tumhari zaat thi jin ka matan
ya shayad zindagee ki reet hey
jo pa loo phir nahin rehti lagan [/b][/quote]
Oh ho, yeh kya likh diya aap ne.... isay ghazal kehtay hain ?
"jo mujh ko rakh ker k kho gaya, wo shola tha kabhi tera badan" tauba tauba... aap kehna kiya chahti hain ? yeh ghazal likhi hai aap ne ? aur Matla kahan hai janab ? maaf keejiay ga, aap hi ne farmaya tha ke apni raaye ka izhaar zaroor keejiay /heheno /jump

ARAY MEIN TO MAZAK KAR RAHA HOON, BOHAT ACHI LIKHI HAI BEWAFA JEE, ITS REALLY NICE, AUR AAP KO DARNE KI ZARURAT NAHIN HAI, KHARAB LIKHNE WALON KO YAHAN PEETA NAHIN JAATA.,

<!--QuoteBegin-BEWAFA+Nov 1 2003, 10:46 PM--></div><table border='0' align='center' width='95%' cellpadding='3' cellspacing='1'><tr> <td>QUOTE (BEWAFA @ Nov 1 2003, 10:46 PM)</td></tr><tr><td id='QUOTE'><!--QuoteEBegin--> aik gazal likhnay ki himet ki hey aur dar dar k post ker rahi hoon coz mein khud ko gazal likhnay k qabil nahin samajhti baher haal islah ki talab hey so app sab apni ray ka izhaar zaroor kijiye ga


muhabbaat ki raseeli tashnagi
zaher alood sa iss ka milan
hamesha toot jaien misl-e-dil
meray hi khawab dein mujh ko chuban
jo mujh ko rakh ker k kho gaya
wo shola tha kabhi tera badan
mein chahat ki aziyat kaat ker
bayan kernay lagi apni thakan
sitaray bhar k likhti hoon jinhein
mujhay wo lafz detay hein agan
woo saray herf mein nay kho diye
tumhari zaat thi jin ka matan
ya shayad zindagee ki reet hey
jo pa loo phir nahin rehti lagan [/b][/quote]
bohut khoob bahnaa,,,,,,,,,,,,,, ,,,,,,,,,,, @};- @};- @};- /luv :clapping

wah kamaal tharir hai khoob likha hai app nay /weldone

wow...very nice....bohat umda...keep it up...

very nice ji

<!--QuoteBegin-udaas+Nov 1 2003, 08:49 PM--></div><table border='0' align='center' width='95%' cellpadding='3' cellspacing='1'><tr> <td>QUOTE (udaas @ Nov 1 2003, 08:49 PM)</td></tr><tr><td id='QUOTE'><!--QuoteEBegin--> <!--QuoteBegin-BEWAFA+Nov 1 2003, 07:46 PM--></div><table border='0' align='center' width='95%' cellpadding='3' cellspacing='1'><tr> <td>QUOTE (BEWAFA @ Nov 1 2003, 07:46 PM)</td></tr><tr><td id='QUOTE'><!--QuoteEBegin--> aik gazal likhnay ki himet ki hey aur dar dar k post ker rahi hoon coz mein khud ko gazal likhnay k qabil nahin samajhti baher haal islah ki talab hey so app sab apni ray ka izhaar zaroor kijiye ga


&nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; muhabbaat ki raseeli tashnagi
zaher alood sa iss ka milan
hamesha toot jaien misl-e-dil
meray hi khawab dein mujh ko chuban
jo mujh ko rakh ker k kho gaya
wo shola tha kabhi tera badan
mein chahat ki aziyat kaat ker
bayan kernay lagi apni thakan
sitaray bhar k likhti hoon jinhein
mujhay wo lafz detay hein agan
woo saray herf mein nay kho diye
tumhari zaat thi jin ka matan
ya shayad zindagee ki reet hey
jo pa loo phir nahin rehti lagan [/b][/quote]
Oh ho, yeh kya likh diya aap ne.... isay ghazal kehtay hain ?
"jo mujh ko rakh ker k kho gaya, wo shola tha kabhi tera badan" tauba tauba... aap kehna kiya chahti hain ? yeh ghazal likhi hai aap ne ? aur Matla kahan hai janab ? maaf keejiay ga, aap hi ne farmaya tha ke apni raaye ka izhaar zaroor keejiay /heheno /jump

ARAY MEIN TO MAZAK KAR RAHA HOON, BOHAT ACHI LIKHI HAI BEWAFA JEE, ITS REALLY NICE, AUR AAP KO DARNE KI ZARURAT NAHIN HAI, KHARAB LIKHNE WALON KO YAHAN PEETA NAHIN JAATA., [/b][/quote]
oh hooooo
app kaisay ker saktay hoo meri tareef app ko tu waisay bhi hum jaisoon se beer hey naa i mean bewafwoon se....
khair ager nahin likhna aata mujhay tu koi baat nahin kam az kam app se tu behter hi likh leti hoon gi naaa
waisay jo mein kehna chahti hoon woo app ki iss choti se samajhdaani mein aaye ga nahin coz app sirf biwi per kahi hoi baat hi samajh saktay hoo naaa aur koi baat tu app ka dimagh kabool hi nahin ker sakta anyways thx for the replyy
waisay do u know k mein nay jo aik adad gazal likhi thi app ki ghazal k jawab mein uss ka sher kafi pasand kia sab nay
pata hey kon sa wala

BEWAFA k muqabil jab aaya UDASS
phir kisi k muqabil bhi aaya nahin

Yaar sisoo kuch khas maza nahi aya aur abhi merey khayal main kafi islah talab hey kuch mazeed nazr-e-sani karo is pay but over all kafi acchi koshish hey aur jis tarhaN nazm acchi kehti ho Inshallah ghazal pay bhi uboor ho jaey gaa yaa phir ghazal he UBOOR ho jaey gee

Khush Raho Hamesha
/luv