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AOA kutch din kabal aik misre pe ghazal likhi paish hay
"misra e tarha tha" tohmat nahi kisi per, shikwa nahi kisi sey"

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Merey baghair bhi tum jeena hansi khushi sey
Parta hi farq kiya hay, ik shakhs ki kami sey

Barbadiyoo.n main apni bas dosh hay humara
"Tohmat nahi kisi per, shikwa nahi kisi sey"

Hay sans aab tu bhaari, jeena bhi ik khwaari
Yarub mujhe utha ley, hoon tang zindagi sey

Ye aaene main jaane hay koun jhab dikhata
Kiyu guftugu karey hoon main aik ajnabi sey

Dewaangi ki mujh per, tohmat hay jo ghalat hay
Ruswa hoi hoon main tu apni junoo-gari sey

Shagufta baat meri pal'lo main bandh lena
Umeed mat lagana aab tum kabhi kisi sey

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Shagufta Saleem
Jan,2004.

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"misra e tarha tha" tohmat nahi kisi per, shikwa nahi kisi sey"

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Merey baghair bhi tum jeena hansi khushi sey
Parta hi farq kiya hay, ik shakhs ki kami sey

Barbadiyoo.n main apni bas dosh hay humara
"Tohmat nahi kisi per, shikwa nahi kisi sey"

Hay sans aab tu bhaari, jeena bhi ik khwaari
Yarub mujhe utha ley, hoon tang zindagi sey

Ye aaene main jaane hay koun jhab dikhata
Kiyu guftugu karey hoon main aik ajnabi sey

Dewaangi ki mujh per, tohmat hay jo ghalat hay
Ruswa hoi hoon main tu apni junoo-gari sey

Shagufta baat meri pal'lo main bandh lena
Umeed mat lagana aab tum kabhi kisi sey

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Shagufta Saleem
Jan,2004. [/b][/quote]
Buhat khoob Shagufta

/aoa

wah wah, bohut umda, class ki ghazal ikhkhi hai, MashaAllah waqt ke saath nikhaar aa raha hai
ueh lafz "chab" hai ya kuchh aur


"Karey hoon" ki tarkeeb pehli martaba dekhi hai....mera khayal to nahin ke aesey hota hai, baharhaal------- To Atif Bhai

Bohat khoob Shaguftaa ji .. /weldone

Salaam Shagufta ji!

bohat achhay (y)
bara khoob likkha hai,sada andaaz main khubsurat
ashaar kahay hain, parh k achha laga
bas muazrat k saath aap ka Maqta kuch ghor
talab hai, ager aap apnay Naam se pehlay "A" laga lain to
Wazan theek ho jaaiga.

A Shagufta baat meri pal'lo main bandh lena
Umeed mat lagana aab tum kabhi kisi sey

or "Junu gari" ka istarhaan use daikha nahi but aap ne use
kia hai to yaqeenan soch samajh k kia hogaAnyways, ye aap
ki achhi Ghazal hai /happy
keep writing

Soft voice /piano

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salam!
shagufta very nice ghazal written in soft and sentimental way.keep sharing.
Bina Ahmed.

:clapping :clapping :clapping
Shagufta,
Bahut hi achi ghazal likhi hai. Laikin zara kisi pukhta kar shair say consult kar laina kay," guftagu karay hoo'n," lag sakta ya naheei'n Wazan theek hai misray ka, laikin karay etc Ghalib aur Zauq kay zamanay kay alfaz hei'n. Waisay AP BAHUT HI ACHI SHAIRA HEI"N, No doubt.

Nice :clapping