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**Shagufta Basit** · #21 01-21-2004, 05:58 PM

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Originally Posted by tahirraza

salam

wah ..bohoot khoob ..matla kamal ka tha app ki ghazal ka

Ye aaene main jaane hay koun jhab dikhata
Kiyu guftugu karey hoon main aik ajnabi sey

v nice

tahir

AOA, bohat shukriya Tahir k app ko meri koshish passand aai,

khush raheye hamesha

**Shagufta Basit** · #22 01-21-2004, 06:00 PM

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Originally Posted by if wishes were horses...

salam!
shagufta very nice ghazal written in soft and sentimental way.keep sharing.
Bina Ahmed.

AOA BINA, hosla afzaai ka be-hud shukriya

aaenda bhi app k taw'un ki mutam'mani hon

khush raheye

**Shagufta Basit** · #23 01-21-2004, 06:04 PM

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Originally Posted by hayat

:clapping :clapping :clapping
Shagufta,
Bahut hi achi ghazal likhi hai. Laikin zara kisi pukhta kar shair say consult kar laina kay," guftagu karay hoo'n," lag sakta ya naheei'n Wazan theek hai misray ka, laikin karay etc Ghalib aur Zauq kay zamanay kay alfaz hei'n. Waisay AP BAHUT HI ACHI SHAIRA HEI"N, No doubt.

AOA Aamir, sab sey pehly tu shukriya

phir aatey hain" karey hoon" ki taraf, sahi kaha app nay k is ka istamal yahan durust nahi tha, magar is ki waja ye nahi k chacha ghalib k zamane main hota tha tu bateji Shagufta nahi kar sakti

) balke " karey hoon" aaj bhi 3rd person singular k saath istamal ho sakta hay magar 1st person k saath nahi, is waja sey islah k baad isey " karoon hoon" kar diya gaya hay.

app ka aik baar phir shukriya khush raheye

**Shagufta Basit** · #24 01-21-2004, 06:05 PM

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Originally Posted by sfimran

Nice :clapping

thanks

khush raheye hamesha

**Shagufta Basit** · #25 01-21-2004, 06:11 PM

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Originally Posted by BigDaddyCool

Barbadiyoo.n main apni bas dosh hay humara
"Tohmat nahi kisi per, shikwa nahi kisi sey"

humain ye sher pasand aaya, baqi ghazal main "karay hoon", aur "junoon gari" per dil nahin thuka.

and i believe its "chub" not "jhub" . Correct me if i m wrong.

Amir

AOA Aamir, jee sab sey pehly tu shukriya

aur jaisa k main pehly bhi likh chuki hon k lafz"jhab" mujh sey jaane unjaane main likha gaya tha jis liye mazrat khwa hoon, aur app tammam ahbab ki shukkar guzaar bhi jinhoo nay islah farmaai.

karey hoon aur junoo gari ki babat bhi bari tafseel sey jawabaat deye hain baaqi app meri islah shuda ghazal main dekh lejeye

aik baar phir shukriya
isi tarha tanqeed o tareef ka silsila jaari rakkheye kyu k hum nay likhne wale isi tarha aik dosre sey kutch sekh saktey hain

khush raheye hamesha

**Shagufta Basit** · #26 01-21-2004, 06:13 PM

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Originally Posted by tanha_musafir

I m really impressed by ur talent Shagufta Sis. Bohat achay.
Keep writing n sharing,
Regards,
A@tif

AOA Aatif bhai, bohat sey bohat zayada shukriya, main bata nahi sakti k app jaise bare shair sey tareef sun k kitni himmat bandh'ti hay.

main tah e dill sey shukar guzaar hoon app ki
khush raheye hamesha

**Shagufta Basit** · #27 01-21-2004, 06:16 PM

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Originally Posted by diya

salaam shagufta aapi /hug

bauhat hi acha likha hia aap nai it is beautiful lekin aapi mayusi kafur hai kyon aisi batain kar rahi hain..... :yehkya

achi ki umeed rakhiyai aapi aur khush rahiyai

AOA DIya, bohattttttt shukriya sis

mujhe bohat khushi hoi k tumhain meri ghazal passand aai

aur jahan takk baat hay mayoosi ki tu aisi bhi koi baat nahi hay bass wo kya kahtey hain k

Hansi k rang tu kai meharbaan they lekin
Udasiyoo.n sey hi nibhti khameer aisa tha

aik baar phir shukriya
khush raho hamesha

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