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This is a discussion on lafz meri sansoon main kiun ulajhty jaty hain within the Urdu Poet Club forums, part of the Urdu Poetry category; nazm ka khayal bohat umda hai.. uske liye dad qubool kijiye.. ab thori si tanqeed ho jaye.. nazm phir say ...
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#11
04-30-2008, 01:54 PM
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 nazm ka khayal bohat umda hai.. uske liye dad qubool kijiye.. ab thori si tanqeed ho jaye.. nazm phir say seenay maiN.. jo bhatakti jati hai.. nazm ka seenay maiN bhatakna.. kuch samajh nahiN aaya.. yeh line thori tawajjah chahti hai.. rawani ki bhi kami mehsoos hui.. lafzoN ki tarteeb badal kar daikhiye.. maine kuch tabdeeliyoN k sath rewrite ki hai.. daikhiye.. zindagi k kaghaz par titliyoN k saray rang mil k aik doojay say rang khubsoorat sa ik naya banatay haiN aur maiN k rangoN say nazm kehna chahti hooN kuch bhi keh na pati hooN dukh k kitnay darya jo zindagi k kaghaz par titliyoN k rangoN ko is tarah miTatay haiN khamshi sulagti hai dard gungunatay haiN aansuoN ki barish maiN khaab bheeg jatay haiN khush rahiye
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#12
04-30-2008, 01:57 PM
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buhat umdha kwash hi ishi tara laktay rahin aur share kartay rahain
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#13
04-30-2008, 02:10 PM
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buhut shukriya mhro g bus aap snior agar thori nazr karam karty rahain to inshalla main bhi kabhi acha likh paaon gi w/salam |
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04-30-2008, 08:24 PM
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#15
05-01-2008, 12:59 AM
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Assalamualaik, Quote:
1.gif ")1") Allah hafiz
__________________ Yadash Bakahir ham bhi aadi thay dil lagi kay Ab khwab ki hain batein qissay thay jo kabhi kay |
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05-02-2008, 06:35 AM
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05-02-2008, 06:50 AM
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#18
05-02-2008, 01:06 PM
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bohat khob Aisha Sahiba, khoob nazm kahi hy aap ne.... Mehroo Sahiba ki corrections k bad nazm ka husn aur baRh gya hy... aik suggestion hy k aap apni likhi hui nazm aur mehroo sahiba ki corrections ko line wise compare kreN aur dekheN k kis trha lines flow meiN ati haiN to aap ko aaeinda behter andaz se likhny meiN madad mily gi... meri janib se daad qubool kreN likhti raheN aur ham se share krti raheN, khush raheN aabad raheN....
__________________ tu na jadoN paas channaN! key ay saady paas way, din vi udaas saady, rataaN vi udaas way, luT gya chain sadaa, rus gye hassay way, khushiaN ny dur nssiaN... akhaN cham cham wssiaN!!! |
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05-03-2008, 01:21 PM
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05-05-2008, 07:16 AM
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nice one ayesha, keep it up
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