Urdu Poetry Forum

walikum asalam..

bohat achi ghazal hai janaba ... khubsoorat khayalat say muzayyan..

takneeki hawalay say kuch khamiyaN haiN... woh maiN bataye daiti hoN.. chalo ready ho jao

Rasm-e-ulfat nibhana chahtay hain
Tumhay apna banana chahtay hain

shair ka khayal umda hai.. magar pehlay misray maiN "rasm-e-ulfat" ne wazan mutasir kar diya...

Gaya lamhoo.n ko dekho phir se wapis
Gar mumkin ho bulana chahtay hain

yeh shair khayal aur wazan k hawalay say nazr-e-sani chahta hai... lafzoN maiN thori hair phair karo...

Ijazat do tou duniya se chupa kar
Tumhay dil mai basana chahtay hain

bohat acha shair hai... masoom sa..

Zamanay ke sitam tou she chukay hum
Tumhay ab azmana chahtay hain

bohat khubsoorat... dilkash khayal.... khas taur par dad is shair k liye..

Chalo tum jeet lo phir dil ki bazi
Hum phir se har jana chahtay hain

is shair ka pehla misra bohat acha laga mujhe... doosray misray par phir say tawajja do...

Faqat manga hay hum nay sath tumhara
Kaho kia hum zamana chahtay hain?

misra-e-sani.. bohat khoob kaha.. magar pehla misra tawajja chahta hai..

GhamoO.n se ilteja hay lout gayen
Hum phir se muskurana chahtay hain

misra-e-oola bohat acha hai... magar... misra sani... thoray say lafzoN k hair phair say bilkul theek ho jayega...

is martaba maine khamiyoN ki nishan dahi ki hai bas.. maiN chahti hooN k tasheeh tum khud karo.. takay tumhaiN andaza ho sakay k kahaN kitni tabdeeli say kitni behtari aa sakti hai..

bohat khush raho

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bohtttt hi pyari ghazal kahi hai
daad qubool kijyey...
humari naqis aqil o ilm k mutabiq ye chund alfaz ka heir pher hazir-e-khidmat hai...

Gaya lamhoo.n ko dekho phir se wapis
Gar mumkin ho bulana chahtay hain


pehla misra Perfect hai...
doosra agar ye hojaey to...
Ho gar mumkin'bulana chahtey hain

Pehla misra Perfect!
Chalo tum jeet lo phir dil ki bazi
Hum phir se har jana chahtay hain

Hum ab phir haar jana chahtey hain

Faqat manga hay hum nay sath tumhara
Kaho kia hum zamana chahtay hain?

doosra misra Perfect!
agar tumhara ki jaga TERA hota to...kesa lagta...?
Faqat maanga hai humney saath tera

GhamoO.n se ilteja hay lout gayen
Hum phir se muskurana chahtay hain

Pehla misra Perfect!
doosra humarey naqis khayal k mutabiq agar ye hota to...
Hum ab phir muskurana chahtey hain

MASHAALLAH sey bohttt acha likha hai aapney!
keep Shaiirii!
ALLAH karey zor-e-qalam aur zyada...(AAMEEN,SUMM A AAMEEN)
(S.N.Neha)

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bohat umdah ghazal.. jis me khayaalat apni tamamtar maasoomiat k sath bahar dilhla rahey thay. tashi bhi zaberdast rahi. sirf aik baat jo mein ne mehsoos ki, wo ye k agar pehlay sheir k doosray misray ko

Ho gar mumkin'bulana chahtey hain
k bajaey youn ker lein k ..

jo mumkin ho bulana chahtey hain

to sheir me thori si besakhtagi aajaey gi jo ghazal k overall efect ko improve kere gi.

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Sehra mein ... Justujoo teree lay aai @};-

Aik bht umdaah kawish Zeni aap ki


Mehru aur Saadi ne jo suggestions deeN unhooN ne aap ki ghazal ko mazeed nikhaar diya


Khush rehiya

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Chalo tum jeet lo phir dil ki bazi
Hum phir se har jana chahtay hain

Wah......Bohat Khobsurat Gazal Kahi App Ne.
iss Piyari Si Gazal K Liye Bohat Si Dad Kabool Kijiyeee.

Sada Khush Rahiyeee.

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buhat achey zene .................... ... u ne bataya nahi u poetry bhee kerti ho


acha laga u ko yahan dekh k .................... ......... mazeed share kerti rehna

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