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pehle se khadokhaal na pehle se hain khayal
hum kitna aik saal k andar badal gaye

pehle sa hai lehja na pehle si hain batain
ik zara si baat par lehjay badal gaye

kaha tha us nay k usay yeh rasta pasand nahi
aur yeh suntay hi hum apna rasta badal gaye

laakh samjhanay par bhi wo na samjha
aur hum samjhanay ki wo ada badal gaye

badla hai rasta, badli ada, badli hai apni zaat
hairat hai ik shaks ki khatir hum kia kia badal gaye

usay kaho k ab aur na kuch badalnay ko kahay hamain
aisa na ho use khabar mile hum apne jeenay se marna badal gaye

ahan !!! going too fast n aggressive ... lohay sey loha kaatein mazeed badlein nahi ... share kartey rahyeh khoob likha

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shukria laikin pahli dafa likha hai kuch is liay kuch ghalti hoi ho tu mazrat khoa hu

Bohat ajeeb kaha ... aap mazrat us sey keh rahe hain jis ko shayari samajh a jaye toh bari baat ho khoob likha likhtey rahyeh

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Pehlay to aap pehli dafa hi itna acha likhnay per daad qabool karain. Bohat Khoob.

Aik do chezon per halki see twajoh dainay ki zaroorat hai:

1- Qafia aur Radeef: Choonkeh aap pehli dafa likh rahay hai, is liye is cheez per ghor nahin kar paye.

Radeef say murad wo lafaz ya alfaaz hain hai jo shair jay aakhir main baar baar dhraye jayen. Misaal kay tor per

hum kitna aik saal k andar badal gaye main

badal gaye wo alfaaz hain jo har shair main duraye ja rahay hain. Yeh is shair ki radeef tehray.

Qafiya say murad hai wo hum awaaz alfaaz jo shair kay aakhir main aatay hain. Qafiya hamisha radeef say pehla lafz hota hai. Misaal kay tor per ooper waalay shair main qafiya hona chahiye: andar

Ab aap is say miltay jultay alfaaz poori ghazal main bator qafiya istamaal karain gay misaal kay tor per:

andar, sha'ir, bahar, saagar, gaagar, behtar, kafir waghaira waghaira


2- Ghazal main wazan barqaraar nahin hai. Is kay liey aap tutorials ko aik dafa perh lain.

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Khair Andesh,
Waheed Akhtar Wahid
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laakh samjhanay par bhi wo na samjha
aur hum samjhanay ki wo ada badal gaye
nice.

v nice................ ........