Urdu Poetry Forum

ather29 · #1 07-31-2007, 10:34 AM

Itnay Bhi Marasim Na Bharhay Koi
Ankh Bhar Aay Jab Hath Churai Koi
Qurban Kar Dein Gay Jaan Bhi Hum Apni
Kuch Dair Talak Sath Tu Nibhay Koi

**m a natiq** · #2 07-31-2007, 10:56 AM

Bohat Khooob Qitta Kaha Hai App ne.....

Issi Tarah Likhty Rahiyee Aur Hamary Sath Share Karty Rahiyee..... Mazeed Nikhar Ata Chala Jaye Ga....

Sada Khush Rahain....

**kanch ki mehroo** · #3 07-31-2007, 09:16 PM

umda janab...bohat umda khayal hai.. lekin agar ap is rubai ko aisay kar laiN ;

aah itnay bhi marasim na barhaye koi
aankh bhar aaye k jab hath churaye koi
jan dainay maiN koi aar nahiN hai lekin..
kash kuch dair talak sath nibhaye koi...

to wazan ka masla bhi khatam ho jayega..

khush rahiye

**WanderingThoughts** · #4 08-02-2007, 09:05 AM

Ather bhai bohat achy thoughs haiN, aur andaaz bhi acha hy aap ka... aik bat aur kahuN ga k aap Mehroo sahiba ki tarmeem pr zuroor ghor kijiay ga, k kis trha kuch alfaaz k badalny se sher wazn meiN a g'aay... aap ko zuoor bohat kuch seekhny ko mily ga.

youNhi acha acha likhty raheN aur ham se share krty raheN, Allah Mola aap ko bohat ziada ata kary, khush raheN, aabad raheN....

ather29 · #5 08-03-2007, 10:48 AM

ji mein zaror seekhnay ki koshish karon ga.....
aap bus mujhay yonhi encourge kartay rahein.....

**foqiazafar** · #6 08-03-2007, 11:20 AM

very nice
bohat khub

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Itnay bhi marasim na bharhaye koi.....

Itnay bhi marasim na bharhaye koi.....