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RulesThis is a discussion on Ghazal within the Urdu Poet Club forums, part of the Urdu Poetry category; Ghazal Guldaan mein kuch phool sajana chahtee thee tumharee khusboo sey gher mehkana chahtee thee Namumkin tha mera tujh sey ...
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#1
10-06-2008, 02:01 PM
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Ghazal Guldaan mein kuch phool sajana chahtee thee tumharee khusboo sey gher mehkana chahtee thee Namumkin tha mera tujh sey milna faqat teri aarzoo mein jeena chahtee thee woh sub kuch jo hum aik doosray ko keh na sakay woh fasanay nigahon sey bayaan kerna chahtee thee apnay gher ki sard dewaro pur Terey naam key deep jalana chahtee thee pyaar key rehguzaron pur jin pur hum saath guzray unhein mein bhool jana chahtee thee terey kuch tootay howey wadoon ko apnay dupattay sey baandh lena chahtee thee zindagee is kushmakush mein guzree sara mujhey aadat thee tumharee ya tumhein chahtee thee Sara Last edited by Sara Defence; 10-07-2008 at 03:25 PM.                  |
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10-06-2008, 02:20 PM
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achy thoughts haiN sara sahiba.... magar abhi ap khud ghor kreN to kuch misry baRy aur kuch choTy nazer a rahy hoN gay apko... so misroN k wazn aur un ki rawani ki taraf tawaju ki zuroorat hay... ap baRy sho'aara k kalam ko paRheN aur ghor kreN k kis terha lafzoN k munasib istamal se unhoN ne apny misroN meiN rhythm aur wazn paida kiya... Allah Tala apko bohat ziada ata kary... khush raheN aabad raheN... 1.gif ")1")
__________________ ------------------------------------------------- Bedil libaas-e-zeest bohat deeda-zeb tha aur ham ne is libaas ko ulTa pehan liya... (Bedil Haidri) |
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#3
10-06-2008, 05:10 PM
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wakai bahot kamaal likha hai.....
__________________ ye Dil bhulaata nahi mahobbatein uski parhi huyi hai mujhe kitni aadatein uski |
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10-07-2008, 03:21 PM
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Thank you Wandering. Actually main aik shaira nahi ho, mere sath bus aik hadsa howa aur us ke baad se maine likhne shuru ker diya, isliye shairi ke bare mein kuch khas nahi janti. Jub likhne shuru kiya tou realize kiya keh mujhey shairi se kitna lagao hai isliye ab islah kerne ki koshish ker rahi ho. App ki sari baatein agli dafa likhne se pehle dehan mein rakho gi. Thank you for pointing out the mistakes. I hope you liked it anyways. |
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#5
10-07-2008, 03:22 PM
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Thanks a tonn Dewani. |
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10-07-2008, 03:32 PM
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10-07-2008, 03:36 PM
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I will surely keep that in mind the next time. |
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10-08-2008, 09:09 AM
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sara sahiba, khayaalaat bahut umda hain, agar in ko shair ke qaalib mein khoobsoorti se dhaalna hai to mazeed mashq karni paregi. Likhti rahiye aur nikhaar aae ga Insha Allah.
__________________ is dasht mein jal jal Zameer - e be asar ka Haal ab DhooNDay waheeN per khak-e-dil, paaey jahaaN bhi rakh rakh |
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#9
10-08-2008, 07:29 PM
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Je Owys, agli dafa dehan rakho gi. Pasand kerne ka shukriya. Meri agli ghazal bhi zaroor perhiye ga. |
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#10
10-08-2008, 07:41 PM
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Bohat Acha khial he ap ka likhte rahen Ore jase ke Senior,s ne kaha he ke Tawaja ke zarorat he to mashaq karte rahen khosh rahen |
Ghazal 
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