Urdu Poetry Forum

sajidraheem · #1 07-21-2006, 06:32 PM

My New Poem

Apnay ash'aar se phir dardd jagaa lainay do
Aah mai'n phir wo asar lot k aa lainay do

Meri dunyaa bhi to ghaafil thi mujh se aaj talak
Abb k mujh ko meri dunyaa ko bhulaa lainay do

zindagi bharr to kaee log nibhaayaa hai'n karai'n
Hum pe ik baar zaraa mo'ut ko aa lainay do

Saans ki dorr ki kyaa baat kiyaa kertay ho
Hum ko dhaagaa koee mazboot banaa lainay do

Dardd sehnaa bhi to aasaa'n thaa, sahaa kertay thay
Sho'uq se apnaa lahoo aaj bahaa lainay do

Darr pe un ke kharay kharay he phirr se shaam hui
Un ko ik baar to chokhatt pe tum aa lainay do

Abrr, aankho'n mai'n hai, barsaat bhi aa jaay gi
Un k honto'n pe mera naam to aa lainay do

Ab to bay-zaar si dunyaa ye nazar aati hai
Apnay ash'aar bhi Sajid ko sunaa lainay do

Written By: Sajid Raheem Sheikh
(sajidraheem@hotmail .com)

**:Qassim:** · #2 07-21-2006, 07:30 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by sajidraheem

My New Poem

Apnay ash'aar se phir dardd jagaa lainay do
Aah mai'n phir wo asar lot k aa lainay do

Meri dunyaa bhi to ghaafil thi mujh se aaj talak
Abb k mujh ko meri dunyaa ko bhulaa lainay do

zindagi bharr to kaee log nibhaayaa hai'n karai'n
Hum pe ik baar zaraa mo'ut ko aa lainay do

Saans ki dorr ki kyaa baat kiyaa kertay ho
Hum ko dhaagaa koee mazboot banaa lainay do

Dardd sehnaa bhi to aasaa'n thaa, sahaa kertay thay
Sho'uq se apnaa lahoo aaj bahaa lainay do

Darr pe un ke kharay kharay he phirr se shaam hui
Un ko ik baar to chokhatt pe tum aa lainay do

Abrr, aankho'n mai'n hai, barsaat bhi aa jaay gi
Un k honto'n pe mera naam to aa lainay do

Ab to bay-zaar si dunyaa ye nazar aati hai
Apnay ash'aar bhi Sajid ko sunaa lainay do

Written By: Sajid Raheem Sheikh
(sajidraheem@hotmail .com)

Sajid Raheem saahib ... Tamaam aSh'aar khoobsurat haiN ... Bohot pyaarii ghazal kahii hai aap ne :clap5

Qassim Mirza :Qassim:

**DIL** · #3 07-21-2006, 08:56 PM

Welkom to Hg

Ghazal bohut khub kahi hai app nay

Khush Rahiyea

Abaad Rahiyea @};-

**Kinza...!** · #4 07-21-2006, 09:02 PM

Bohat khub.............

**rida jabeen** · #5 07-21-2006, 09:35 PM

Asslamo alikum sajid pehli bata to yeh k yeh nazam(poem)
nahin balkay mere khyal main aik ghazal hai
aur ghazal waqai aap ne dil moh lene wali likhi hai
bohut khoob poori ghazal hi zabar10 hai magar khass tor
par yeh line be hada chhi lagi
Abrr, aankho'n mai'n hai, barsaat bhi aa jaay gi
Un k honto'n pe mera naam to aa lainay do

sajidraheem · #6 07-21-2006, 10:20 PM

Assalamualaikum...
well, 1st of all thanks alott forliking the ghazal..
And.. ya definitely it is a ghazal.. i'm sorry I didnt take care of that column in any of my posts..
I'll be careful next time

Hoslaa afzaaee ka bohot shukriyaa

Duaao'n mai'n yaad rakhiyay gaa

**withlove** · #7 07-21-2006, 10:37 PM

Abrr, aankho'n mai'n hai, barsaat bhi aa jaay gi
Un k honto'n pe mera naam to aa lainay do

wahhhhhh .. sajid sahib...yaqeenan.. iss umdah ghazal ke liye aap bohat si daad-o-tehseen ke mustahiq hein.. so daad haazir hai .. qabool kijiye.. Pesh kernay ka Bohat Shukria.. @};-

wafa aur dua ke saath
withlove @};-

**Veso** · #8 07-21-2006, 11:45 PM

Bauhat umdah jee

thanx 4 sharing

**Shumaela Rana** · #9 07-22-2006, 04:04 AM

Abrr, aankho'n mai'n hai, barsaat bhi aa jaay gi

bht khoob (Y)

likhtey rahiye khush rahye

**WanderingThoughts** · #10 07-22-2006, 06:20 AM

jnab achy khyaalat haiN aap ke....

ghalzal achi hy magar ye do ashaar to hasil'e ghazal lagy mujhy:

Apnay ash'aar se phir dardd jagaa lainay do
Aah mai'n phir wo asar lot k aa lainay do

Abrr, aankho'n mai'n hai, barsaat bhi aa jaay gi
Un k honto'n pe mera naam to aa lainay do

is achi ghazal kehny pr daad kabool ke'ji'ay....
aur yunhi likhty rahi'ay and sher krty rahi'ay....

Allah Mola aap ko bohat ata kary....