Originally Posted by azam_hfd

Yasi
kaisi ho ?
boht achi kawish... rwani main bhi kuch faraq dekhnay ko mila....
lekan abhi mazeed gunjaish hay...
sahoolat kay liay nishandahi kar rha hoon

jenay ka wada mein nebahtie chalie gie
mernay ki arzoo mein chupatie chalie gie

Pehlay misray main zara si kami hay.....

jeenay ka wada main to nibhati chali gai..
main aihd zindagi ka nibhati chali gai...
jeenay ka wada kar kay nibhati chali gai...

doosra misra theek hay lekan agar "main" ki jaga "ko" kar do to ziada acha ho ga....

apnoun ki yaad muj ko satatie chalie gie
yaadoun ki seryan mein otartie chalie gie

wazn kay lihaz say OK
lekan doosra misra...... oh...... tumhain samjhaya tha qafiay ka khyal rakha karo.... stati aor utarti ham qafia alfaz nahin hain....

dor se woh mujeh yun deakahtay rahay
haya se mein khud hi sametie chalie gie

waz aor qafia dono mein gaR baR hay. simaTti ya sameti pehlay qafiay kay zumray mein nahin aa rha...

babul ka ghar chorna mushkil laga osay
rukhsat hoie dulhan to rootie chalie gie

pehla misra........ babul kay ghar ko choRna mushkil laga usay....
ohho..... qafia nahin mila.....

baraf ki chaadar jo pehlie hai her teraf
qudrat Khuda ki woh dekahtie chalie gie

"Baraf" nahin hota "Barf" hota hay... lihaza wazn mein naqs aa gya....

dekho yasi agar tum baqaida urooz seekhnay ki koshish karo to boht jald achi shaira ban sakti ho...
bahar hal mashq-e-sukhan jari rakho... meri duain tumharay liay hain...
khush raho
Allah Hafiz