Thread: Raye shumari baraye muqabla-e-ghazal goi.. March-08
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Old 03-29-2008, 04:52 AM
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Ye sahi hey ke tarah detey huey Qafia aur radeef ka zikr naheen kiya gaya...lekin thori si tawaja di jaaey tow saaf dikhaai dey ga ke kon sa sahi qafai aur radeef hey.

Jin shora ney "zameeN pe aa ke rahey" ko use kiya hey un ke akser ashaar ke alfaz tow khubsoorat hein lekin muaani bilkul mohmil hein.

Mujhey Sohail saheb ki is baat sey bhi ittefaq hey ke kayee bohat achey shora ney kuch ashaar mein wazan aue behar per ziyada tawajuh naheen di...shayad waqt ki kami is ka baec ho.

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