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Default ra'y shumari bra'y Muqabla-e-Mazahia Ghazal ~*~Eid -ul-Azhaa Special~*~

As-salam-o-alaikum Dosto!

is maah Eid-ul-Azhaa ki nisbat se mazahia muqaabla-e-ghazal goi ka ehtmaam kiya gya tha, hmeiN khushi hy k kafi dostoN ne is muqably meiN shirkat ki... hum tamam shurka k shukr guzar haiN..


nataij ka ailan judges ke mushtarka faislay par mabni hota ga... lehaza judges say guzarish hai k woh 31st Dec. tak hmeiN apne faislay say agah kar daiN... judges har kawish ko 1-10 tak marks day saktay haiN...

humaray Mohtaram judges k naam darj-e-zail haiN;

(Sohail Malik, Mehtab, saahir, Zain, Kanch ki Mehroo, WanderingThoughts)

Evalutaion ka criteria yeh hai;

Behr aur Wazn = 4
andaaz-e-bayaN, Rawani, Takayyul, alfaaz ka ist'emal = 6
total marks = 10

muqablay maiN shamil ghazlaiN yeh haiN:

1- mujahid khan



2- autam

chupke chupke raat din uska bartan manjvana yaad hai
humko ab tak kaprey dhonay ka woh zamana yaad hai

dopehar ki dhoop mein kaprey sukhanay kay liye
woh mera kothay pay bhi nangey panv jana yaad hai

Aa gaya jab sunday ki shab bhi kabhi zikr-e-shopping
woh mera meri biwi say, ATM card chupana yaad hai

saas sasur ki dostoN ab kiya sunaoun daastaaN
sasuraal na janey ka mujhey har ik bahana yaad hai

daaru pee kay jab bhi ghar mein aana para mujhey
woh mera daantoN taley, ilaichi chabana yaad hai

dekh liya jab bhi kabhi rastay mein kissi dusri larki ko
Biwi kay ghussay ko deikh kar mera thartharana yaad hai

waqt-e-rukhsat office, Ab bhi yaad aata hai mujhey
biwi kay purse say car ki chaabi churana yaad hai

second show deikh kar woh mera raat ko ghar dair say Aana
Biwi ka ghussay say darwaza na kholna yaad hai

Jub Kabhi Ittefaqan taway pey roti jal janay par
woh mera tere belan say sir phatwana yaad hai

Jub kabhi tujh say teree umar poochnay per who tera duppatay main
Sharmana aur 34 ko 17 bata tey huey muskurana yaaad hai

Apni umar chupanay kay liye who tera munnay ko peetna
Aur Tujhe Mummy nahi baaji bulanay ko kahna yaad hai

haftey baad hi moun utha kar meikey chalay jana tera
aur mera ghar mein jharu pochaa lagana yaad hai

kheench lena woh tera salary ka lifafa dafataan
aur tera beauty parlor pay woh paisay urana yaad hai

yaad hai begum ab bhi woh tera belan se mujhey peetna
aur baad pitney kay tera woh iodex lagana yaad hai

aaye din saley saliyooN ka aana ghar pay mere
woh tera unkey samney mujhey murgha banana yaad hai

shukr hai 'HumTum' teri shaadi nahi hui abhi
shaadi shuda YarooN ka woh, rona rulana yaad hai !!

3- faridnawaz

Aaj tak woh band baje shaamiyana yaad hay
Khud ko itni dhoom se sooli chaRhana yaad hay

Teen moqay bhi diye qazi ne GHor-o fikr ke
Aaj tak who qeemati moqay gaNwana yaad hay

Aik nah kafi thi her muskil se bachne ke liye
hum ko haN ka faislaa who ehmaqana yaad hay

ghar jise laye the hum roti pakane ke liye
ab pakati hay hameN us ka pakana yaad hay

nah silaee janti hay nah cooking maloom hay
haN oose shohar ko ungli per nachaana yaad hay

uski her ik baat per kehna hi paRta hay ‘bajaa’
is tarah ooska hameN barsoN bajana yaad hay

mantay heN hum logoo hadesaa hoga shdeed
kiyon keh hum ko waqeaa itna puranaa yaad hay

4- land of sorrow

ye ho gaye kia haalaat SADAR sahb
ik kero muj se mulakat SADAR sahb

apposition ki position khatar naak hai
ker do havaly jail khana jaat SADAR sahb

main kum sin shaitaan kaya mashwara don
aap to khud hoo bady chaalaak SADAR sahb

khud he ban jaoo sadar , wazir_e_azam be
nahin chayeh hamain ye wuzraat SADAR sahb

mangty rahoo amrica se amdaad roozana
har din hoo ap ka jumairaat SADAR sahb

zindgi main kabi b wardi na utarna ta k
door rahain afaat_o_billiyaat SADAR sahb

hakoomat ho apki jeet koi or jaye
ye kahan ki ''ikhlakiyaat'' SADAR sahb

aman ka suraj nikal he ana hai akhir
ho gaye hai kaafi raat SADAR sahb

5- ali4everfriend



6- Stubborn Lioness!




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Bedil libaas-e-zeest bohat deeda-zeb tha
aur ham ne is libaas ko ulTa pehan liya...

(Bedil Haidri)

Last edited by WanderingThoughts; 12-25-2007 at 01:38 PM.