Do shaire individually bohot pasand aye:

1) Har cheez ka kuch mol hai manDi maiN jahaaN ki
Biktay na kisi mol, wo anmol haiN aaNsoo
2)BhaNwray ki jafaaoN pe ho matam jo kali ka
Shabnam ki nami maiN kabhi Dhal jatay haiN aaNsoo

Technical masle kafi hain lekin sab se barh kar to ye ke ye ghazal ya nazm donon main qualify nahin kar rahi....isko dobara dekho aur kisi aik direction par le jaao

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Adaab teri bazm ke jeenay nahiN daitay
DeewanoN ko jeenay ki tamanna to baRi hay
(Qabil Ajmeri)