As-salam-o-alaikum dosto!

Marking k sath hazir huN.... bohat khushi ki bat hy k is bar muqabla-e-terhi ghazal meiN bohat si achi achi ghazleN paRhny ko miliN…. Jin ki marking kuch youN hy:

1: Furqan85

Furqan bhai aap ne achi ghazal kahi, hy….. baz misroN se mehsoos hota hy k ap ki tabiat meiN qudarti wazn maujud hy, ager aap kuch mehnat aur tawaju deN to is se bhi acha likh sakhty haiN…. Jesy k ye misra bohat acha laga ap ki ghazal ka “Kuch mer mity qadmoN meiN tery tab na la kr”. Aur isi trha kuch aur misry bohat rawaN aur khubsurat lagy….
Mager abhi overall dekha ja’ay to aap ki ghazal k akser sheroN meiN wazn aur rawani ka masla hy.

Aap ki ghazal ko milty haiN:

Behr aur Wazn: 3
Andaz-e-bayaN, rawani, takhayul, alfaaz ka istamal = 3

Total Marks = 6


2: Shoaibb4u

Agli ghazal hy Shoaib bhai ki… sohail bhai aap ki ghazal k thoughts to bohat achy haiN…. Mager ap ki kawish meiN Ghazal k kuch bunyani araakeen ki kami nazer aaei, jesa k “qafia” aur radeef”. aur yahi do chezeN ghazal likhny ka pehla step hota hy. So aap ager ghazal k basics ki taraf taawaju deN gy to is se aap ko me’yaari gahzal likhny meiN bohat madad mily gi…

Aap ki ghazal ko milty haiN:

Behr aur Wazn: 2
Andaz-e-bayaN, rawani, takhayul, alfaaz ka istamal = 2

Total Marks = 4


3: Fehmeeda ishtiaq

Fehmida Shaiba aap ki ghazal bhi khoob rahi, khyalat bohat umda haiN, khas kr gira-band sher meiN bohat hi acha khyal bandha hy ap ne… bas aap ki ghazal meiN kami jo rahi wo wazn ki aur rawani ki hy…. Ager ap in do baton ki taraf tawaju deN aur in pr aboor hasil krny ki koshish kreN to aap ki shairi meiN bohat nikhaar paida ho ga…

Aap ki ghazal ko milty haiN:

Behr aur Wazn: 2
Andaz-e-bayaN, rawani, takhayul, alfaaz ka istamal = 3

Total Marks = 5


4: Faypal

Bari aati hy Afzal bhai ki, jnab aap ki ghazal bohat hi khoob rahi, dusry sher ki to kya hi bat hy, khas kr dusry sher ka dusra misra to is qadar berjesta aur rawaN hy k lutf hi aa gya… kuch sheroN meiN to aap ne andaz-e-baayN aur rawani k lehaz se bohat acha asar choRa… alfaaz ka istamal bhi aisa raha k misry khud-bakhud ada ho rahy haiN… teeshra sher hy to bohat acha lekin is meiN lafz “ye” izafi sa lag raha hy, k is k baghair bhi matlab wazen hy sher ka…. (Aisa laga k rawani ko pora krny k liay ye lafz istamal hua hy). Aakhri se pehly waly sher meiN aap ne lafz istamal kiay “wo piyar”, yahaN lafz “wo” wazahat talab hy, sher meiN is k mutaliq koi ishara nahi milta k aap kis pyar ki bat kr rahy haiN… isi trha maqta k dusry misry meiN lafz “bhi” izafi sa laga, k is ki waja nazer nahi aaei… mager overall aik bohat achi ghazal aap ki janib se parhny ko mili….

Aap ki ghazal ko milty haiN:

Behr aur Wazn: 4
Andaz-e-bayaN, rawani, takhayul, alfaaz ka istamal = 4.7

Total Marks = 8.7


5: Yasmin Ahmad

Yasmin Sahiba aap ne bhi aik achi ghazal kahi… aap k sheroN ko paRh kr mehsoos hua k aap ki tabiyat meiN bhi qudarti rawani maujud hy, so aap se yahi kehna hy k jis qadar ho sakta hy likheN aur apni is salahiat ko baRhany ki koshish kreN…. Sath hi Urdu shairi k deegar araakeen pr bhi tawaju deN, aap ki shairi meiN mazeed nikhaar paida ho ga…. Aap ki gahzal k pehly sher ka pehly lafz k sath bhi wali moamla derpesh hy k is lafz ki jaga nahi banti sher meiN… (Yaani izafi hy…) ahsaar meiN takhayul acha hy, alfaz ka istal bhi khoob hy…

Aap ki ghazal ko milty haiN:

Behr aur Wazn: 3
Andaz-e-bayaN, rawani, takhayul, alfaaz ka istamal = 3.5

Total Marks = 6.5



6: Bekhudi

Aap ki ghazal bhi bohat umda hy, pehly kuch sher to khoob kahy aap ne. alfaaz ka istamal aur takhayul ki parwaz khoob hy, mager wazn, behr aur rawani k lehaz se kami mehsoos ho rahi hy, so isy behter krny ki koshish kreN… overall aik achi ghazal share ki ap ne,

Aap ki ghazal ko milty haiN:

Behr aur Wazn: 2.5
Andaz-e-bayaN, rawani, takhayul, alfaaz ka istamal = 3.5

Total Marks = 6


7: Noor-al-Sabah

Bari aati hy Noor-al-Sabah Sahiba ki ghazal ki… aap ki ghazal bhi bohat hi khoob rahi… khas kr aap ne girah bohat achi lagaei... aap ki ghazal maiN aik bat jo mehsoos ki wo ye k sheroN meiN alfaaz ka istamal to acha hy lekin un ki banawat k hawaly se kuch behtri ki zuroorat hy… misral k tor pr panchweN sher k pehly misry pr ghor kreN: “tum zat meiN ho apni hi eilaan-e-mahabat”. Is misry meiN kuch lafzoN ki tarteeb badalny se misra ziada dilkash ho sakta hy. Baqi khyalat bohat umda haiN, aur sheroN meiN rawani bhi qadry achi hy….
Aao ki ghazal ko milty haiN:

Behr aur Wazn: 4
Andaz-e-bayaN, rawani, takhayul, alfaaz ka istamal = 5

Total Marks = 9


8: gumaan

Rehan bhai aap ne bhi aik achi ghazal share ki… kuch hseroN meiN khyalat bohat achy haiN aur alfaaz ka istamal bhi khoob hy… mager overall dekha ja’ay to abhi ap ki shairi shairi meiN rawani aur wazn k hawaly se mehnat ki zuroorat hy… so jis qadar ho sakta hy apny khyalat ko supurd-e-qalam kry raheN, aur sath hi urdu shairi k in pehlo’oN ki taraf tawaju deN, aap ki shairi meiN zuroor nikhaar aata ja’ay ga…
Aap ki ghazal ko milty haiN:

Behr aur Wazn: 2
Andaz-e-bayaN, rawani, takhayul, alfaaz ka istamal = 3

Total Marks = 5


9: Aas

Aas bhai ki bari aati hy… jnab aap ne to kamal hi kr diya, yaani k ik ada pr musharaf ko baich aa’aiN gy aap? Khayalaat to bohat jarihana haiN aap k, aap k sheroN meiN wazn, rawani, andaaz-e-bayaN aur alfaaz k achy istamal k lehaz se behtri ki gunaish nikalti hy…. Wahi bat kahuN ga k mashq-e-sukhan jari raheN aap k kalam meiN nikhaar ata ja’ay ga.

Ap ki kawish ko milty haiN:

Behr aur Wazn: 1
Andaz-e-bayaN, rawani, takhayul, alfaaz ka istamal = 2

Total Marks = 3


10: Meesam Kazmi

Kazmi Sahab ki ghazal pr bat krty haiN… jnab aap ne bhi khoob ghazal pesh ki. Kuch misry to bohat lutf de rahy haiN… takhayul, alfaaz ka munasib istamal aur rawani k lehaz se aap ki ghazal bherpur hy…. Albat’ta pehly sher k pehly misry meiN lafz “aaj” ager maujuda ki baja’ay kisi aur muqam pr hota to shyad misra parhny meiN ziada bhala lagta. Is k sath sath aakhri sher k dusry misry meiN lafz “bhi” izafi mehsoos ho raha hy… overall aik umda ghazal share ki hy aap ne.

Aap ki ghazal ko milty haiN:

Behr aur Wazn: 4
Andaz-e-bayaN, rawani, takhayul, alfaaz ka istamal = 4.7

Total Marks = 8.7


11: silent_wishes

Ihsan sahib aap ki ghazal bhi khoob rahi, khyal umda pesh kiay aap ne, alfaaz ka chunao bhi khoob hy, lekin abhi behr aur wazn k hawaly se kuch muqamaat pr kami ka ehsas hua… misroN ki banawat aur alfaaz k munabis muqam pr istamal ki taraf bhi tawaju ki zuroorat hy…. likheN aur khoob likheN, kyuN-k ye points aisy haiN jin pr kuch tawaju di ja’ay to dur ho ja’aiN gy… overall aik achi ghazal rahi.

Aap ki ghazal ko milty haiN:

Behr aur Wazn: 3
Andaz-e-bayaN, rawani, takhayul, alfaaz ka istamal = 3.5

Total Marks = 6.5


12: Shehr-e-Wafa

Jharnaa Gul sahiba aap ki ghazal bhi un ghazalz meiN se rahi jian ki maarkty waqt khasi diqat pesh aaei… wo is liay k khasa baareeki se dekhna paRa her sher ko…. Takhayul, lafaz k chunao, wazn aur behr k lehaz se aap ki gahzal umda rahi… bas kuch muqamat pr aisa mehsoos hua k kuch alfaz ka istamal wazn ko pora krny k liay kiya gya hy, missal k tor pr 2nd sher k pehly misry meiN lafz “ye” aur 4th sher k pehly misry meiN lafz “is” zuroorat k tehat nahi balkay rawani k liay istamal huay haiN… aap ki ghazal ka aik sher to bohat hi dilkash laga, bohat sadgi aur malaimat hy is sher k aahang meiN… khas kr dusra misry meiN.

Lab keh na saky bat jo, aankhoN ne kahi hy hy,
palkoN ko jhuka kr, kabhi palkoN ko uTha kr.

Overall aik umda kawish hy.

so Aap ki ghazal ko milty haiN:

Behr aur Wazn: 4
Andaz-e-bayaN, rawani, takhayul, alfaaz ka istamal = 4.5

Total Marks = 8.5


13: Zeneya

Aap ki taraf se bhai aik achi ghazal parhny ko mili. Aap ki ghazal k ahsaar dekh kr andaza hota hy k aap zood-go shairi haiN… kafi sher likh diay aap ne… sheroN meiN khyalat achy pesh kiay ap ne, mager abhi urud poetry ki bunyadi pehluoN maslan wazn , rawani waghaira ki taraf tawaju ki zuroorat hy…

Aap ki ghazal ko milty haiN:

Behr aur Wazn: 2
Andaz-e-bayaN, rawani, takhayul, alfaaz ka istamal = 3.5

Total Marks = 5.5


14: Bailamos_

Aakhri ghazal hy Umair bhai ki, to jnab aap ki ghazal paRh kr ehsaas hua k aap ki her tehreer pichli ki nisbat ziada nikhri hui hoti hy… is bar bhi muqably k jo ghazal ap ne pesh ki wo bohat achi hy, khyalat umda haiN aur unheN achy andaaz meiN pesh bhi kiya hy aap ne, bas wahi bat hy k abhi wazn, rawani, behr aur deegar pehlo’oN ki taraf tawaju ki zuroorat hy…

Aap ki ghazal ko milty haiN:

Behr aur Wazn: 2
Andaz-e-bayaN, rawani, takhayul, alfaaz ka istamal = 3.5

Total Marks = 5.5

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