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Default Re: raye shumari baraye muqabla-e-tarahi ghazal..
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1: Furqan85.

muqablay maiN aik naya chehra daikh kar khushi huwi..welkom...apke khayalat yaqeenan bohat khubsoorat haiN...khas taur par kuch asa'ar aur misroN ne mujhe mutasir kia..magar abhi mazeed mehnat ki zaroorat hai...ap behar aur wazan par tawajja dijiye...yaqeenan bohat khubsoorat likhnay lagaiN gay...

behr aur wazan = 1.5
deegar = 3.4
total = 4.9

2: Shoibb4u

apka nam bhi muqabloN maiN pehli martaba daikha...welkom.. apki koshish khoob rahi..magar abhi apko mehnat ki bohat zaroorat hai...2 misroN maiN apne qawafi ka khayal nahiN kia...wazan aur behr ki bhi bohat kami mehsoos huwi... magar dil chota karnay ki zaroorat nahiN...mashq jari rakhiye...

behr aur wazan = 0
deegar = 1
total = 1

3: Fehmeeda Ishtiyaq

apki ghazal parhi...achi lagi...magar abhi apko bhi mehnat ki zaroorat hai...behr aur wazan par tawajja dijiye...aur mashq jari rakhiye..

behr aur wazan = .5
deegar = 2.2
total = 2.7

4: Faypal

bhai ji...apka nam muqablay maiN daikha...bohat khushi huwi...aur apki ghazal parh kar khushi dobala ho gaii...yaqeenan ap Poets Club maiN aik shandar izafa haiN...mashAllah bohat umda likhtay haiN...aisay hi likhtay rahiye..

behr aur wazan = 4
deegar = 4.8
total = 8.8

5: Yasmin Ahmad

apko bhi muqablay maiN daikh kar khushi huwi...ainda bhi aisay hi shirkat karti rahiye ga... ghazal apki umda rahi...mazeed mehnat jari rakhiye..

behr aur wazan = .9
deegar = 2.4
total = 3.3

6: bekhudi

PC aur contest maiN aik khush gawar izafa daikh kar bohat acha laga..apke khayalat mutasir kun haiN...magar abhi apko wazan aur behr par mazeed tawajja dainay ki zaroorat hai...yaqeenan bohat jald ap is khami par bhi qabu pa laiN gi...

behr aur wazan = 1.9
deegar = 3.5
total = 5.4

7: Noor-al-Sabah

Noor...yaqeen mano...bohat hi khubsoorat...bohat hi umda ghazal kahi tumne...bohat lutf aya parh kar... bohat umda khayalat ... khubsoorat andaz...wahhhhh...

behr aur wazan = 4
deegar = 5.2
total = 9.2

8: gumaan

HG aur PC maiN khush amadeed gumaan...achi kawish rahi apki...magar abhi mazeed mehnat ki zaroorat hai...mashq jari rakhiye...

behr aur wazan = 0
deegar = 1.2
total = 1.2

9: Aas

aap aur yahaN ... ... khush gawar hairat huwi apko PC maiN daikh kar... apki ghazal bhi khoob rahi... bas zara wazan ki kami thi...baqi sab theek tha...

behr aur wazan = 0
deegar = 1.3
total = 1.3

10: Meesam Kazmi

wahhhh janab...bohat hi umda ghazal kahi aapne...PC maiN ap bohat hi khubsoorat izafa haiN...aisay hi shandar likhtay rahiye...wahh..

behr aur wazan = 4
deegar = 4.9
total = 8.9

11: silent_wishes

apki kawish bohat umda rahi...kuch misray to bohat hi khubsoorat kahay aapne...magar kahiN kahiN wazan ki kami mehsoos huwi... mashq jari rakhiye...yaqeenan bohat jald aap bohattt khubsoorat likhnay lagaiN gay...

behr aur wazan = 2.9
deegar = 3.3
total = 6.2

12: Shehr-e-Wafa

bohat khushi huwi tumhara naam muqablay maiN daikh kar...bohat umda...aur dilkash ghazal kahi tumne...wah..umeed hai ainda bhi shirkat karti rahogi...

behr aur wazan = 3.8
deegar = 4
total = 7.8

13: Zeneya

HG aur PC maiN khush amadeed Zeneya...apki kawish umda rahi, khas taur par khayalat..magar abhi wazan k hawalay say apko mazeed mehnat ki zaroorat hai...likhti rahiye...

behr aur wazan = 2
deegar = 3
total = 5

14: Bailamos_

Umair sahab...muqablay maiN apka nam daikh kar khushi huwi... ghazal apne umda kahi...khayalat ne khas taur par mujhe mutasir kia...wazan aur behr par mazeed tawajja dijiye...aur mashq jari rakhiye..

behr aur wazan = 1
deegar = 3
total = 4

aap tamam sathiyoN ki shirkat ka bohat shukriya..umeed hai ainda bhi apne khubsoorat kalaam k sath muqabloN maiN shirkat kartay rahaiN gay...

naik tamannaoN k sath...
khush rahiye
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