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 | ~*~Raat Ka Rahii~*~ | | | Join Date: Nov 2004 Location: HaWa K DoSh PaR Age: 27
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 Re: raa'ay shumari bra'ay Muqabla-e-Terhi Ghazal (May 07) | |
Sab ne buhat he ache kalaam share kiay hain
Pehle tu sab ko hamari janib se buhat si daad qabool hoo
Ab zara jaldi jaldi se marking bhi kardete hain (paa feju naraz matt hona plj)
1st Entry Faypal Jiii.
Muhtaram app ki ghazal buhat umdah rahi, Tamam he ashaar ache hain
Bss ika duka masle hain but majmoi toor par achi tehrer rahi
App ki tehrer ko marks jate hain = 8.5
2nd Entry Miss Noor-al-sabah
Muhtarma hamesha ki tarah app ki tehrer achi rahi but kahen kahen wazn ki garbar bhi rahi. Go k chand ashaar buhat he umdah rahe but majmoi toor par dekha jaay tu ghazal ki khoobsurti wazn main garbar ki waja kam hogai.
App zara is taraf dhiyan dijiay aur koshish kijiay k ashaar ko ramooz k mutabiq kahen.
App ki tehrer k liay marks hain = 08
3rd entry hay miss Sunehri jiii
Jii tu muhtarma app ne 1st time is compete main participate kia hay tu buhat achi kawish hay. Lekin abhi app ne buhat kuch sekhna hay, koshish kijiay k ghazal ko aik tarz main kahen (means wazn main) aur lafazi ki taraf bhi zara dhiyan dijiay k khayalat tu umdah haim but kahen kahen lafazi ka masla darpesh hay. Umed app ki agli kawish main buhat change nazar aaay ga
App ki tehrer k liay marks hain = 7
App sab ko buhat buhat mubarak hoo
Aur ainda bhi isi tarah se participate karte rahen
Khush Rahiay |