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Originally Posted by WanderingThoughts  Zeeshan bhai! bohat khoob nazm kahi hy ap ne... khyalaat ka baha'o acha hy, lekin alfaaz meiN rhythm kuch kam hy... alag alag misroN ko dekheN to kuch ka rhythm milta hy, lekin majmoi tor pr nazm aik hi rhythm meiN nahi hy... aik bat aur, k nazm ka unwaan kuch aur rakhty to behter tha... (aisa unwaan jo nazm ka sara maqsad aik do lafzoN meiN bta de....) over-all aik achi nazm hy, so dad qubool kreN, aur safar jari rakheN... Allah Mola aap ko bohat ziada ata kary... khush raheN, abad raheN... |
thankxxxxxxxxx faizan pai
k ap ko nazam pasand aii
actully mein nay ridhm k bager likhnay ki koshish ki thi
nasar ki soorat mein pata nahin kamyab howa k nahin
kher me behtari ki koshish karoon ga
sada khush rahein
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