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Originally Posted by zain  wah,bahot khoob Raza bhahi,bahot hi khoobsurat ghazal kahi hai aap ne,chand aek sher to bahot hi pasand aaye,so dheron daad hamaari jaanib se bhi qabool kijiye,
aek/do baatain mazeed kehna chaahata hoon,umeed hai mind naheen karain ge,(wesey yeh mera zaati khayaal hain,in se aap ka ya kissi aor ka mutafiq hona bilkul bhi zaroori naheen,1.gif ")1") )
matla yoon to bahot achha hai,lekin merey khayaal main agar yoon hota to ziyaada achha lagta ...ke...... behar mushkil,zameeN chaahey kaRi ho bano mazmoon tum, to shaairy ho doosarey sher main lafz...boley...khatak raha hai,....mumkin hey ke yeh mera weham ho,phir bhi ho sakey to dekh lijiye ga,
third last sher ka misra-e-oola agar yoon hota to shaaid ziyaada achha aor rawaan lagta ke....... mujhey kab rehney detey hain yeh tanha
sitam hon,gham hon ya phir be kali ho, yeh sirf mera zaati khayaal hai,kissi ka bhi is se mutfaq hona zaroori naheen hai,
bahot khush rahiye,aor likhte rahiye ke bahot achha likhtey hain aap, |
Salam,
Zain appki rah numaai ka bay hudd shukriya, asal mein baat yeh hai kay mein taqtee kay kisi usool par bhee amal nahee karta bus zaban ki rawani aur apnay andazay kay mutaabiq shair kehta hoon aur mujhay andaza hai kay is tarhaan ghalti ki gunjaish ziada hoti hai.
Mein app ka mamnoon hoon kay app nay itni deeda reezi ki meri ghazal par aur sath sath islaah bhee kar daali, shukriya mein nay app kay bataye hoiein tabdeelian kar deen hein, "Bolay" wala poora misra hi badal dia hai usay bhee check kar liejh ga.
W salam
Raza Alam