wah,bahot khoob Raza bhahi,bahot hi khoobsurat ghazal kahi hai aap ne,chand aek sher to bahot hi pasand aaye,so dheron daad hamaari jaanib se bhi qabool kijiye,
aek/do baatain mazeed kehna chaahata hoon,umeed hai mind naheen karain ge,(wesey yeh mera zaati khayaal hain,in se aap ka ya kissi aor ka mutafiq hona bilkul bhi zaroori naheen, )
matla yoon to bahot achha hai,lekin merey khayaal main agar yoon hota to ziyaada achha lagta ...ke......

behar mushkil,zameeN chaahey kaRi ho
bano mazmoon tum, to shaairy ho

doosarey sher main lafz...boley...khatak raha hai,....mumkin hey ke yeh mera weham ho,phir bhi ho sakey to dekh lijiye ga,

third last sher ka misra-e-oola agar yoon hota to shaaid ziyaada achha aor rawaan lagta ke.......

mujhey kab rehney detey hain yeh tanha
sitam hon,gham hon ya phir be kali ho,

yeh sirf mera zaati khayaal hai,kissi ka bhi is se mutfaq hona zaroori naheen hai,
bahot khush rahiye,aor likhte rahiye ke bahot achha likhtey hain aap,

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