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Originally Posted by WanderingThoughts  bai wah Haya Saahiba.... achi kawish hy, khawb ki takraar achi lagi, bohat achy khyalaat bandhy, so bohat si daad qubool kreN...
lekin kuch muqaamat pr, parhty waqt rawani toot'ti mehsoos hui.... misaal k tor pr, 2nd last misra, baqi nazm k rhythm se match nahi hota... isi trha kuch aur muqamat pr bhi aisa hi mehsoos hua. (ye meri bilkul zaati ra'y hy aur maiN ghalati pr bhi ho sakta hun...)
aap ki is bary maiN kiya raa'y hy... |  Aap Ko Nazm Pasand Aai Mujhay Khushi Hui.. Mujh Mai'n Aik Kharabi Yeh Hay Kay Jaisi Bhi Aamad Ho Mai'n Share Kar Laiti Hoo'n Owr Aap Sab Kay Replies Kay Baad Poetry Ko Sahi Karti Hoo'n...Ji Yaqeenan Aap Ko Jo Khaami Mehsoos Hui Hay Woh Nazm Mai'n Mowjood Nazar Aa Rahi Hay... Mai'n Time Miltay Hi Nazm Mai'n Kuch Changes Kar Kay Again Share Karti Hoo'n... Aap Mujhay Bataiye Ga Kay Kuch Behter Soorat-E-Haal Hui Kay Nahi? |