bai wah Haya Saahiba....
achi kawish hy,
khawb ki takraar achi lagi,
bohat achy khyalaat bandhy,
so bohat si daad qubool kreN...

lekin kuch muqaamat pr, parhty waqt rawani toot'ti mehsoos hui.... misaal k tor pr, 2nd last misra, baqi nazm k rhythm se match nahi hota... isi trha kuch aur muqamat pr bhi aisa hi mehsoos hua. (ye meri bilkul zaati ra'y hy aur maiN ghalati pr bhi ho sakta hun...)

aap ki is bary maiN kiya raa'y hy...

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