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 | Ishtiaq | | | Join Date: Aug 2005 Location: London,UK
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wah!!!!!!!!
bahot khoob Saahir saahib,bahot khoobsurat ghazal kahi aap ne,har shair bahot pasand aaya,so bahot si daad qabool kijiye,is khoobsurat tehreer par,
aek chhoti si baat aor kehna chaahta hoon,agar naagwaar na guzrey to....
1) shair#2 main aap ne "sanbhal" ko 12 ke wazn par baandha hai,jabke is ka wazn 22 hai,
2) issi shair#2 ke pehley misrey main aap ne likha "chal" aor doosarey misrey main "hamaaraa" ,jo ke merey khayaal main "shutr ghurbah" main aata hai,
ho sakey to is shair ko phir dekh lijiye,1.gif ")1")
mera khayaal hai ke yeh kehney ki zaroorat naheen ke merey in khayalaat se aap ka mutafiq hona bilkul bhi zaroori naheen hai,
bahot khush rahiye,likhtey rahiye,ke achha likhtey hain aap,
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