bai bohat achi kawish hy... Aur waqai is se bari tareef nahi hoti k shair se poocha ja'ay k ye aap ki hi takhleeq hy...

pehly 3 ashaar maiN aap ne qafia ayr radeef ka ehtmam kiya.. lekin aakhri do ahsaar maiN sirf radeef nazer aaya, qafia nazer nahi aaya... is ki kiya waja hy.. plz bta deN....

aur overall aik achi koshish pr meri janib se bohat si daad qabool kiji'ay...

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