AssalamoAlaikum,Sorr y this time arround i won't be giving detailed comments as i usually do.
just a sentetnce and marks.

1- KHAIYAAL: mozoo tha Mohabbat , aap ki poori nazm mein kahee'n bhi lafz mohabbat dekhney ko nahi mila, maanta hoo'n ke mohabbat aur chahat mein kuch khas farq nahi , magar competition mein mozoo ko zaroor madd-e-nazar rakhna chahye. aap ko miltey hain total 4 points. 2 mozoo ke aur 2 nazm mohabbat se zayada makeup ko ubhaar rahi hai.

2- chariagy-aakhir-shab:
mozoo aap ka mohabbat hi hai iss liye mozoo ke aap ko miltey hain 4 marks, khayaal aap ki nazm ka achha hai , magar main yeh baat kahey bagahir nahi reh sakta ke aap ki aadhi se zayada nazm oarhna merey liye mumkin na tha, urdu zuban mein talaffuz bohat ahmiyyat rakhta hai, roman urdu(yani ke keyboard se english mein urdu likhna) aasaan nahi , magar phir bhi baaz alfaas aise hotey hain jin ki spelling se pata chal jata hai ke likhney wala urdu mein ussey kaise ada karta hai, maslan IBADAT ko aap ne ABIDAT likha hai , JAANA ko aap ne baar baar GAANA likha hai jise mein GHANA samajhta raha , PHIR ko aap ne PAHIR likha hai , jisey main PAHAAR samajhta raha , WUSAT ko aap ne WASHT likha hai jis ka mujhey nahi ilm ke kya mani hai, baraye meharbaani thori si tawajjo urdu talaffuz aur alfaaz ki adaayegi pe bhi dijye iss se yaqeenan rozmarra bol chaal ke ilaawa shayeri mein khoobsoorati aaye gi. , nazm ke miley aap ko 1 point, total huye 4.

3-Tariq Aziz:
bohat umda nazm likhi hai aap ne yaar ji. mozoo ke aap ko miltey hain 5 points , nazm mein rawani bhi hai , khayaal bhi achha hai , mosiqiyyat bhi bohat hai, magar nazm .... achanak ruk si gayi HAR AIK DASTAK SE CHOANK JANA ..... iss ko mazeed continue kiya ja sakta tha.
3.5 marks khayaal (andaz-e-bayaan) ke, total huye 8.5

4- Filmsy
urdu mein angrezi shamil karna hamein kabhi bhi pasand nahi aaya , issi liye 2 saal pehley ham ne jasoosi digest waloo'n ko khat likh ke mana bhi kiya magar meri baat nahi maani unhoo'n ne. mozoo aap ka har satar mein nazar aa raha tha. nazm mein takraar bhi bohat hai iss lafz ki aur kahee'n kaheen se nasar lagi me ko. aap ko miltey hain 7 points, 4+3.

5- HAYA n:
bohat achhi nazm likhi hai aap ne aap ko miltey hain total 8 points , 4+4.

6- WithLove:
bohat khoobsoorat nazm likhi aap ne , aur bohat taweel bhi, iti tawaalat tak mozoo ko sanbhaaley rakhna hargiz bhi aasaan kaam nahi, magar aap en khoobsoorati se yeh kaar anjaam diya. rawaani aur alfaaz ka chunao bhi behad dilnasheen hai aur hamein khasoosan mein Sehra NAward ka istemaal behad bhaaya, aap ko miltey hain 9, 5+4.

7- LuckyLibra
aap ki nazm mein sab se pehley to Imla ki do ghalatiyaa'n nazar aayein, DAAR pe LAtkaaye , aur aap ne WAAR pe latkaaye likh dala, aur doosra RABRA BASRI mein SEEN nahi Suaad aaye ga.
ab nazm ke baarey mein, yeh kahoo'n ga ke lafz mohabbat ki behad takraar ki gayi hai, nazm kafi kainaati qisam ki hai kisi cheez ko chora nahi gaya nazm mein. rawaani ka fuqdaan hai nam mein, aisa laga ke baaz satrein zabardasti daal di gayien beech mein jaise MOAHBBAT WATAN KI MATTI BHI , kachey gharey se achanak watan pe aaye aur iss aik satar ke baad achanak hi doosri jaga pohanch gey, aap ko miltey hain 7 points, 4+3.

8- Pessimist:
parh ke mehsoos hua ke shayed aap ki pehli kaawish ho, gar aisa hai to umda hai. nazm mein alfaaz ki kami behad mehsoos hui, dhoka aur faraib aik hi mani rakhtey hain iss liye yahan pe aik hi khayaal ki takraar ho gayi, aakhri teen satrein parh ke mujhey systametic circulation sytem yaad aa gaya. aap alfaaz ke chunaao pe zara dhayaan dijye, aap ke paas takhayyul hai iss bus achha pehnaawa pehnaaney ki zaroorat hai. aap ko miltey hain 6 points. 4 +2.

9- :Qassim:
aap ki nazm mein sab kuch hai , mohabbat , takhayyul , rawani , mosiqi , magar aik yeh kami si mehsoo hui ke haseena achanak kahan se aa gayi, choonke us ne bhi jawab mein raja se mohabbat ki hi baat ki to shayed pehley kahee'n dekha ho , magar yeh achanak kaise aa gayi. aap ko miltey hain 9 points 5+4.

10- Quill:
aap ki nazm bhi bohat khoobsoorat hai , khayaalaat bohat umda hain, aur mohabbat ka taaruf bhi achha hai , magar aakhir mein kuch kami si mehsoos hui , ehtamaam ke qareeb aa ke achanak sab khatam hogaya. aap ko miltey hain 8.5 marks. 4+4.5.

11- Silentmotion:
bohat khoobsoorat nam likhi aap ne , magar yeh kahoo'n ga ke nazm mein lafz mohabbat kaheen nazar nahi aaya, nazm ki khayaal khoobsoorat hai aur rawaa'n bhi hai. aap ko miltey hain 8 points. 3.5+4.5.

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