As'salam O Alaikum,
mah-e july k nazm-goi k muqable k leye jo mozu diya gaya tha wo tha Karb, jis main humain yaqeenan dili khushi hai k kaafi sara kalaam mosol howa.. jis k leye hum tamam shoa'ara k tah-e dil sey shukarguzar hain... umeed hai aap aaenda bhi aise hi humain khoobsurat kalaam sey nawaztey rahain gain
is maah sey jaisa k aap sab ko ilm hai muqabley k nataij ka ailaan judges k mushtarka faisle pe mabni ho ga... aisa faisla jo k kisi bhi kisi bhi qism ki talouq-dari sey paak aur insaaf k osoloo.n k ain mutabiq ho ga....
zail main muqable main shamil kalaam deye ja rahe hain ... judges sey modbana guzarish hai k 5th August tak isi thread main apne faisle sey agah karain... faisle ka tareeqa intahaai asan hai aap har shair ki nazm ko 1-10
tak numbers dey saktey hain... number dene sey pehley aap pe lazim hai k aap kalaam ki khubiyoo.n aur khamiyoo.n pe roshni dalain... akhir main tamam judges k deye gai numbers ko jama kar k hatmi nataij ka ailaan ho ga
bohat shukriya
Pehla kalaam: Meerji
KARB KI IS RAAT KA ABHI GUZARNA BAAQI HAI
MAIRAY ZAKHMOON SAI LAHOO KA RASNA ABHI BAAQI HAI
SIMMAT JATI YAH RAAT BHI AGER SUN LAI MAIRAY DUKH-OO-DARD
MAIRAY ANSSON KA MAGER DASTAAN BANNNA ABHI BAAQI HAI
MAIRAY DIL MAI JO TASWEER HAI USAY KIS PER AYYAAN KAROON
TOOT KAR MAIRAY DIL KA BIKHARNA ABHI BAAQI HAI
MARII SOORAT PER NAQSH HAI MAIRAY DARD KI TARRAP
KAARZ JUDAAIII KA MUJHE PER ABHI BAAQI HAI
MARROOF HOGIYA HOON HER GALI O BAAZAR MAI MAIN
MAIRA GHER SAI PHIR BHI ABHI NIKALNA BAAQI HAI
TUJHAIE YAAD KARTA HOON JUB HOSH MAI ATA HOON
KIONKAIE TAIRA NAAM LAI KAR MARNA ABHI BAAQI HAI..............
dosra kalam:Karb
Kabhi sunaongi tum ko
me apne ashk ke qisse
wo bhegi shab ke qisse
wo beraham chup ke qisse
ke tere hijr me guzre saare hi karb ke qisse
wo jab chand ne badli se nikal kar mujh se bola tha
bohat tha zoam tujh ko apne gird banhaon ke haale par
kahan hai ab zara dekho
wo har aik tanz ke qisse
kabhi sunaongi tum ko me apne ashk ke qisse
ke kaise
sahil pe chalte thandi lehar pe parhte
garm peraon ke tale sulagti rait ne pucha
ke kaise ayae ho tanha..?
wo aik aik lafz ke qisse
wo bhegi shab ke qisse
be reham chup ke qisse
kabhi sunaongi tum ko me apne ashk ke qisse
luckylibra
gum gercha mere ghar pay mehrbaan bohat hai
mager! zabt main meri bhi pehchan bohat hai
dil main ager derd ka saman bohat hai
to hontoon pay bhi mere muskaaan bohat hai
yeh bherti hoi gurbat yeh monh zoor mehngai
uper say mujay mehnat ki thakan bohat hai
yeh sochon say bhara zehen yeh shoreeda mahool
aise main meri sehet ko nuqsaan bhoat hai
gonahoo kay jo mere pass anbaar lage hain
too neki ka bhi pass mere faqdaan bohat hai
aise main bhi to nay de rakha hai sahara
ee rab mere! tera yeh muj per ahsaan bohat hai
heer_malik
:Qassim:
mystique
rida jabeen
Aik Lamha
Shumaela Rana
KARB?? mri baat sun! mre pass aa ... apni saans sans mre naam kr apney aas pass mjey shaam kr mje zra zra ourrh ley mre tan badan mein gum ho mre rang mein khud ko rang k tu mri chahton ko sang le tri be-basi ka sab lahoo mri teergi ye chaat le chupa k tujhko khud main mein tre hr zakhm ko rafoo kron tri hr chout sey wuzu kron mei khud ko mushakboo kron chaand bn mri raat ka taaj bn mri zaat ka gajra bn mre hath ka sath bn mre sath ka mri baat sun mre pass aa mre pass aa, mre pass aa pyas bhari muskaan tri masoom si wo aan tri tarapti hui wo jan tri karbala ki taigh ho ya tank israel ka tra lahoon unki fatah hui tri jaan jang ka qataa hui mre sohne,pyare nanhey shaheed mahad tri mei lahad tri maa'n tri mei zaat tri mri chahton ko raas kr iss khaak ko tu libaas kr mri baat sun mre pass aa ...
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(judeges main darjzail ehbaab shamil hain
Ankaboot, Inam, Shagufta Basit, Kanch ki mehroo, wandering thoughts)
Evalutaion ka criteria ye hay
Andaz-e-beyan (5 marks) (rawani, alfaz ka ista'amal, takhayyul)
mozu (5 marks)
total marks = 10
tamam judges k diye huway score ka ausat asal score hoga...
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