Urdu Poetry Forum

Beauty


Life is like a rose

Colourful and beautiful

Within each of us

There's a hidden beauty

If only we have time

To look to search

The beauty within

We find ourselves

If we take the beauty

And apply the glow within

Then give that to others

Life will be more beautiful

salams Zakiya sis:
First of all welcome to the English poet's club...I'm really sorry for the delays coz I was pretty busy and still busy in some kinda official tasks.....Zakiya I would say that the theme of your poem is beautiful...however poem needs lil effort in terms of rythm and structure as well...for example you can write the opening verses like this
Vibrant and beautiful....
this life is like a rose...
but wavy as a river
the way it flows....

blah blah.....
well it's a nice try Zakiya sis...nowadays I'm running in shortage of time but I promise that soon I'll tweak your poems InshAllah...promise me that you will continue to post your poems here.....he y! come out of the shy-shell.....keep sharing your beautiful thoughts and visions with us ...waiting for next

Break a leg!

Salam
Thanks for taking the time and commenting on my very first poem,your comment is very valuable,....I knew theres was something missing in this poem...Yes the rythm.....sure i will improve with the next one.... I just needed that little encouragement to start off......

your comment is very much appriciated as usual .....
<<< what an interesting way of motivating......!!!!

Vibrant and beautiful
this life is like rose
But wavy as a river
The way it flows...

this is great....now why did i think of something that......??....