Thread: A poet in Vain
View Single Post
  #2  
Old 05-05-2008, 03:27 AM
junkifunki's Avatar
junkifunki junkifunki is offline
HG Poet
 
Join Date: Jul 2006
Posts: 2,987

Country:

Tutorials: 0

Thanks: 40
Thanked 50 Times in 35 Posts
Nominated 0 Times in 0 Posts
TOTW/F/M Award(s): 0
Rep Power: 2468
junkifunki has a reputation beyond reputejunkifunki has a reputation beyond reputejunkifunki has a reputation beyond reputejunkifunki has a reputation beyond reputejunkifunki has a reputation beyond reputejunkifunki has a reputation beyond reputejunkifunki has a reputation beyond reputejunkifunki has a reputation beyond reputejunkifunki has a reputation beyond reputejunkifunki has a reputation beyond reputejunkifunki has a reputation beyond repute
Awards Showcase
Poet of the Month 
Total Awards: 1
Default Re: A poet in Vain

Salam Chalakie Sis!
Nice to see you here after so many days...hmm busy scientists are always retarted and so you I know the very solid reason behind your this state of mind i.e. trying to disprove the realitivity theory ..apart from joke, a very nice poem indeed..I liked these two stanzas...

Ah!But not going to repeat it,
it's a story so very often told,
it's contained in several books,
which are remarkably sold
(this one is awesome!)

and this one

That Land where I could...
give words to my tears,
Give emotions the Sword,
to fight my innocent fears...


Keep sharing your beautiful thougts and visions with us...Hey! how your studies are going on and how are your backyard bunnies and the ginger cat in your neighbourhood
....loads of prayers for you..now waiting for the next poem
Cheers,
Junki


Quote:
Originally Posted by chalakie View Post
haha with a retarded state of mind...I come back again with something that is not me BUt...BUT...is my reflection, somewhat distorted...yet the reality!

Beggers can't be choosers and choosers ought to keep their mouth,heart and everything shut!

anyway, this is my comeback...at a very low profile.
___________

Can I give you the credit
for making me what I am?
For making me as worthless
as a wheeless tram?

Oh! I thought I'd outdone myself,
I thought I'd known it all,
How you showed me light,
to 'that' Hidden Pitfall...

Ah!But not going to repeat it,
it's a story so very often told,
it's contained in several books,
which are remarkably sold.

I've felt enough of it,
and you say you haven't enough said,
Or maybe you've made me sensitive enough,
and converted me into a poet instead?

Meticulously drilling that pain,
at tender spots of my heart,
Woah! You just had to use words,
for which people use darts!

And the oozing of those feelings,
like the oil from the ground,
Hey you helped me find 'the' Land,
that I'd never all this time found!

That Land where I could...
give words to my tears,
Give emotions the Sword,
to fight my innocent fears...

Yet the words on these crumpled pages,
dance softly under the shadow of 'that' Candle of Pain,
which once landed me in a Hidden pitfall,
but now has made me a poet in Vain.

-chalakie-
______________



I'm ending it here because the feelings which I had gone through to be able to write this...had empowered me so badly that I couldn't write in peaceExtreme lack of inspiration and like Milton I couldn't invoke a Muse...still I tried my best.
Wa'salam peeps.

Last edited by junkifunki; 05-05-2008 at 03:28 AM.
Reply With Quote
The Following User Says Thank You to junkifunki For This Useful Post:
chalakie (05-05-2008)