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This is a discussion on mother - a poem within the Ashaar - Misc forums, part of the Urdu Poetry - Shairi category; I am a novice to Urdu poetry and would love comments/ criticism/ editing, etc from yourselves on this poem i ...
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03-17-2008, 02:03 PM
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I am a novice to Urdu poetry and would love comments/ criticism/ editing, etc from yourselves on this poem i wrote recently: (this is my second post, the first poem i wrote was called 'janaaza mera' and was welcomed and praised by the crew, thanku for that u all) maa naa kay dunyaa may khudaa kaa dee-daar mumkin nahee magar jhalak oos kee daykhtay hay hum rukh-e-amm-mee may shaam o sahar ----------------------------------------------- khudaa kaa dee-daar = glimpe of god rukh-e-amm-mee = mothers face (translation: I agree that you can't see God in this world but we see a glimpse/ sample of his beauty in (our) mothers face morn' and eve')                   |
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03-17-2008, 08:55 PM
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hmmmmmmmmmm.... bohat pyari sharing........... |
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03-17-2008, 11:22 PM
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Zabardast Yaar  .......Keep Sharing 1.gif ")1") ..........
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03-17-2008, 11:32 PM
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Khoob...............
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03-18-2008, 02:56 PM
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Excellent........... . |
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03-19-2008, 01:34 PM
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nawavish! thankyou all! |
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mother - a poem 
